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~ He Who Flys ~
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~ He Who Flys ~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ He Who Flys ~ So many stars above me vibrant, shining in the night - Yet not one to grant my wish, I wish I may, I wish I might... * * * * * * * * "Oh God", I cry out to the sky - "Please make it go away, this longing that I have to catch a shooting star..." I pray. Every night he seems so close I feel him flying by - I stretch, he's barely out of reach I fight back tears and sigh... Retrieving once again, my hand I open it to see - the emptiness I hold instead, of he who flys o'er me... -poetFemme May 6, 2000 |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
PFF This was so beautiful! full of longing and heartwrenching emotion. full of wishing and hoping...u laid your heart right out on the line in this one. beautiful! take care sweets, amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh PoetFemme this is just lovely. One day that star will be in your grasp. They say all good things are worth waiting for netswan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Your poem flows beautifully with desires of something so close, yet far away. You portrayed these images wonderfully. I thoroughly enjoyed this PoetFemme! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Perhaps you already have caught one, my dear, perhaps you already have. Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Every night he seems so close I feel him flying by - I stretch, he's barely out of reach I fight back tears and sigh... Retrieving once again, my hand I open it to see - the emptiness I hold instead, of he who flys o'er me... ---------------------- "WELCOME TO MY WORLD" *smile* *sigh*...oh yes...know it well... but we must try to remember... falling stars burn our hands and our hearts... as a shooting star is burning out on its way down... but damn do I love the intensity of the heat. *smile* beautiful poem of longing my girl... very nice. jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I really like this one. It shines very brightly and beautifully. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
I think I'm going to use one of these "Find out anything about anyone" deals I keep seeing advertized, and get your address... Then find someone to drop me out of a plane over your house one night... I'll wait until after I get the green contacts though.  Oh, did I mention how awesome your poem was? =) "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Gen. . . stick out your hand. . . Reach up. . . higher. . . higher. . . now catch!! See? It's as easy as that. . . Wonderful poem. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is lovely Femme...I hope a nice bright one falls right into your hands...we all have these hopes and desires. James |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Brief glimmers draw us but kindled flame will keep us warm....Here's hoping your glimmer has more heat than that of a fleating star... |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Really beautiful. A wonderful expression. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*That noise you hear is me building you a ladder!* A wonderful poem Gen.....sad and sweet.  |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Nicely done.. was waiting to hear "the rest of the story".. (but that's the.. songwriter in me ) (smile) Very lovely phrasing.. I'm impressed! Kay-lynn |
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