»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #7
»
The Right Moment
| Open Poetry #7 |
|
The Right Moment |
|
|
Tia Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41massachusetts |
The Right Moment I see you from a distance wondering if you noticed me... wanting you to ease my pain, to make it go away... slowly you get off your chair starting to approach me... your eyes wide with amazement, your dying smile. I stand up you're almost here... you open you arms, but walk right by. I turned hoping no one else was there. But there she was, a walking image of beauty...that i'll never be. I'm internally dying for you. your love, your comfort to ease my pain... to make me feel like I am worth something... I sit down. closing my eyes... wondering what it would be like, to have you love me..... |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Tia - All Rights Reserved | |||
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Tia, First let me say Welcome to our little family. Second....you have written your heart well in this piece. I can feel your pain. Know it all too well. Hope to see more of your work soon. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
||
|
A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I could relate to your poem! excellant!!!Welcome to passions!!!! |
||
|
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
back to the top sometimes post's can move quickly in here so I'm sending this back for everyone I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
||
|
TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Tia, Welcome to our family! Very good poem, dear! Very touching and deeply heartfelt. Keep writing straight from your heart -- it will always be your greatest inspiration! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
||
|
Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Nice start Tia, WELCOME to the club!!! Regards, Sudhir In any moment of decision, The best thing you can do is the right thing, The next-best thing is the wrong thing, And the worst thing you can do is nothing. - Theodore Roosevelt |
||
|
Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Tia - Welcome to Passions! This is a lovely piece of writing and I agree with the other's comments that you should continue to write from your heart - well done  Roniece |
||
|
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Tia~ Great way to get started in here with this one, lovely first post. I felt such a sad longing, you never know one day a surprise may await you. Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 05-05-2000).] |
||
|
Mitch B Junior Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 37Orlando, FL |
Reminded me of an old saying, "Don’t put yourself in parenthesis…give a chapter all to yourself" |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
