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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2000-05-04 05:01 PM


A thought before I go


You said that you wanted to grow

so into the valley you must go.

But soon enough you will be back

on top of the mountain and flying high,

just like a magnificent eagle

in the spacious sky.


Jameslee@December1999



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Temptress
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1 posted 2000-05-04 05:08 PM


Cute poem.   Short is great sometimes isn't it?  

 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2000-05-05 04:37 PM


Thank you Temptress...I appreciate that.  James
Honeybee
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3 posted 2000-05-05 05:04 PM


~James~

A short, to the point and sweet poem. Less really is more, your poem speaks volumes about letting go and spreading one's wings for growth!  It reminds me of the famous quote that if you love something you must let it go, if it was meant to be yours it will return, if it doesn't return then it was never meant to be.  Your poem is simply beautiful. I re-read it four times already and if you don't mind I will print out a copy for myself! I Love this one!  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 2000-05-05 05:23 PM


Short but extremely effective, I remember a line from a song I had once heard:
Fly high, like an eagle, fly high into the sky....

(Song was called Flight of Icarus, by a heavy metal rock band: Iron Maiden)

Great work, James, I enjoyed it.

Regards, sudhir

 In any moment of decision,
The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt

Lone Wolf
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5 posted 2000-05-05 09:44 PM


James.....short and sweet.  Very nice message.  So true...  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2000-05-06 07:26 PM


Thank you Melissa, Sudhir, and Lone Wolf for reading and commenting on this.
It is a wonderful feeling to have someone say that your poem is beautiful..Melissa maybe you liked this poem even more than the woman I wrote this for.  She was going thru some hard times..and she has always given me wonderful words of wisdom and comfort...even thru some of my darkest hours.
So I wrote this for her to lift up her spirits...she did appreciate it..she is a precious lady.  I don't mind if anyone prints copies.  James

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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7 posted 2000-05-06 11:46 PM


SBJ, this truly is beautiful...
so much lovely imagery in a few well written lines...
inspirational and uplifting.
perfect!!
take care, jm


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave



pandora
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8 posted 2000-05-06 11:57 PM


james, clearly a lot of thought and feeling went into this... it is... very honest and real and i'm pleased to be witness to a glimpse inside your heart.... thank you for sharing.

pan

netswan
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since 2000-03-28
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9 posted 2000-05-07 02:51 AM


Well done jmlee  such an art to say
so much in so few words

netswan

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2000-05-08 06:20 AM


Thank you Janet, pandora, and netswan...I am stunned, amazed, and pleased with your kind responses.  I am sure that each one who responded has felt or shared the struggle associated with growing and improving.    James
mete out
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11 posted 2000-05-08 06:32 AM


***jmlee,
your precious lady will return, soaring through the sky, your reunion will be told in the stars above.
a beautiful poem.  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
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Australia
12 posted 2000-05-08 06:40 AM


James so tenderly and softly written a beautiful poem  
Thanks for sharing it with us.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



SEA
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13 posted 2000-05-08 03:00 PM


James~ this may be short,(I like short poems) but it says so much of your heart. Love it. -SEA
Denise
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14 posted 2000-05-08 03:28 PM


I also love short poems that say so much! Very well done, James! There are no mountaintops without those valleys, that's for sure!

Denise

JamesMichael
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15 posted 2000-05-09 07:18 PM


Thank you mete out, Tracie, Sea, and Denise for the wonderful comments.   James

Kellsue
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since 2000-05-06
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16 posted 2000-05-09 09:14 PM


Just goes to show that often, less is more.  Your poem conveyed everything it needed to with feeling, by using few words. Bravo!!

~Kellsue


 Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill


JamesMichael
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17 posted 2000-05-11 03:38 PM


Thank you Kellsue for the nice compliment.  James
First__Knight
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18 posted 2000-05-11 04:32 PM


I enjoy your writings more at each reading James.....

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.



JamesMichael
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19 posted 2000-05-12 08:55 PM


Thank you First Knight that is a wonderful compliment.   James
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