Open Poetry #7 |
~Think Twice~ |
devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Stakes raised high, of no demise- ‘Tis fashion to be this way, Create a shell, therein ye dwell- Beyond Hope lies false façade. As shadows fall, thy form stands tall- To render his own living grave, Crucify Love’s Tale, with Hate’s sour wail- Be your own man, come judgment day. At rise of dawn, as Heathen’s spawn- You plagiarize good deeds as fronts, Sighing that you must cremate Trust- Obliterate feelings of lust and want. I beg thy remembrance, 'tis one hindrance- You must categorize true worth as so, Before loneliness confiscates life’s grate- Upon refusal to let your heart grow. Outward solidity, inward insecurity- ‘Tis naught but a waste of time, Count yourself worthy, bless security- Think twice, mayhap this be thine... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
At rise of dawn, as Heathen’s spawn- You plagiarize good deeds as fronts, Sighing that you must cremate Trust- Obliterate feelings of lust and want. ------------------- Outward solidity, inward insecurity- ‘Tis naught but a waste of time, Count yourself worthy, bless security- Think twice, mayhap this be thine... ----------------- Yea... I second what devina just said. WHEW...damn girl...this is way cool. take a bow ...then take a break... ya gotta be exhausted after cranking out this gem. excellent poet-girlie-girl!! take cate, jm |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Devina!! Methinks that you are laying it out on the line with this one. . . I can feel the emotions in this one. . . Superb!! ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Devina~ You did a great job with this. 'I beg thy remembrance, 'tis one hindrance- You must categorize true worth as so, Before loneliness confiscates life’s grate- Upon refusal to let your heart grow.' Doesn't get much clearer than that ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thinking twice yuh ouch it hurts even the second time o yuh this is so well done i say and i get the overall meaning yuh yuh |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Devina---this--I am in awe...much said, much to ponder here...beautifully spoken--emotion most eloquent, me sis...Much love and much more later... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, hell hath no fury, Indeed... Of course the "think twice" is kind of oxymoronic in this world that gives no second chances... You've expressed your emotion well here, D. Michael |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Powerfully said...an excellent poem! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Janet- Guess I was having "one of those days"...that just got worse!!! LOL Thank you... Sven- Again...I know you know!! Thanks hun!! Marge- Yep, this says it all...from my point of corse!!! Now where was that smile you were posta send me???? Love you!!! Walt- sorry dear...didn't mean to make an owie...he he *kiss kiss* serenity- VERY much to ponder sis... a little of me venting too!! Love you girl!! Michael- Yah, second chances run low these days for sure... Sharon- Thank you hun...Powerful means good, yes? Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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