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Open Poetry #7

Laughing Eyes

Effigy
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since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-05-01 05:46 PM

children laughing
laughing in my eyes
eyes I use to feel the glow
glow that hides my disguise
disguise that covers my face
face my fear
fear of death
death in me
me laughing
laughing in my eyes

There is something inside me
and I know it's good,
but understanding is misunderstood.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

1 posted 2000-05-01 08:55 PM

Very good!! I like the way you used your words here...I might try this. Thanks!!

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-05-01 08:58 PM

I like the way you use the last word of each line as the first word of the next line and how it blends together!

Denise

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

3 posted 2000-05-02 01:06 AM

Thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was just a little poetic experiment.

There is something inside me
and I know it's good,
but understanding is misunderstood.

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

4 posted 2000-05-03 08:33 AM

Hi Effigy,

I love the way you did this poem here wonderful, and the poem its self so true so true, eyes can speak so much truth.
Thanks for sharing.

Cerenity

ESP
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since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

5 posted 2000-05-03 09:58 AM

Very clever!! I enjoyed this lil experiment of yours immensely!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

daft
Junior Member

since 2000-05-02

Posts 16

6 posted 2000-05-03 09:58 AM

Very lovely. What a sad & true thing it is, yet i tend to do it all the time. Eyes are the windows to our souls & you see truth. But I as I look off & ponder, I lie every day.

forne_marin
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since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

7 posted 2004-04-16 12:02 PM

Um, obviously you were listening to way too much "They Might Be Gaints" when you wrote this one. Very odd.

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