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The Scream Of Silence
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The Scream Of Silence |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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On the couch with my soul in my hands. I don’t want to go outside today. The light burns my eyes, my skin withers and dies. ~DARKSTAR~ Eyes closed, sowing my head on straight. I’m inside out, or is that outside in? I’m claustrophobic of the outside world. No, I don’t want to go outside today, but inside this place I just can’t stay. ~DARKSTAR~ You’re wasting, I’m wasted, on the inside, perfect outside. I’m burning my bridges to the floor. To the multitudes I’ll shout, but only on the inside reaching out. ~DARKSTAR~ Burning brightly in my eyes. I cower among the shadows. On the inside sweating cold. On the outside I’m getting old. ~DARKSTAR~ I can’t go outside today! ~DARKSTAR~ It never leaves me alone! ~DARKSTAR~ Won’t let me go outside today! ~DARKSTAR~ I scream with indifference! ~DARKSTAR~ I close my eyes. understanding is misunderstood |
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DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
Very powerful. I don't know what else I can say... DiObear |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You've expressed the turmoil very well in this, Effigy. You have made me feel what it must be like to have that fear. Well done! Denise |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
"The Scream of Silence"--Okay. #1. It's a very moving piece. It evokes fear and confusion in the reader. The emotional appeal of the poem is very real. #2. What the heck are you talking about? I can't make sense of it at all. What is a Darkstar? You have your emotional punch, but past that... you can do better. |
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