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laryalee2
Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 96
British Columbia, Canada

0 posted 2002-07-06 03:21 PM

They'll trickle through a crevice of my day --
reflections caught in amber drops of light;
small joys that bounced across my children's play,
a loving voice that whispered, "It's alright."

They briefly pause, impart a wistful calm,
then yield to stern reality's control;
kaleidoscopic moments in my palm
cannot replace the warmth I long to hold.

For those who walk the twilight path alone,
each footstep has a hollow crunch. Mistakes,
still breathing, mock; if only we had known
how quickly brittle stalks of time can break.

The preciousness that makes a moment last
is shaped while it is still within our grasp.

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

1 posted 2002-07-06 03:31 PM

the separation of an inseparable pair is the cruelest of life's situations. This is sad but very well done Lary.Cudos.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

[This message has been edited by pegasus111 (07-06-2002 03:32 PM).]

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2002-07-06 03:59 PM

Oh Larylee I am so sorry. I have been there, I have done that and I will miss my loved ones forever. You write it so well. Love, joyce

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

3 posted 2002-07-06 05:48 PM

larylee2: This is so poignant and beautifully written!

Betty Lou Hebert

hush
Senior Member

since 2001-05-27

Posts 1653
Ohio, USA

4 posted 2002-07-06 11:52 PM

This is an excellent poem.... yes, very poignant... with a very natural rhythm, and great wording withing the parameters of rhyme... not to mention a very touching conveyence of loss...

Love is a ghost train rumblin' through the darkness...

-Counting Crows

laryalee2
Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 96
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2002-07-14 10:51 PM

Thank you, Pegasus...your heart is kind, and your words are gentle.

Hi Joyce...thank you so much -- we try to write our sorrow away, I guess...

Betty Lou, thank you for your warm words.

Hello, Hush!
It's nice to meet you! Thank you for stopping in, and for your lovely comments!

Lary

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