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Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

0 posted 2002-03-22 11:26 AM

12:05am

Waves of thunder
roll over a sleeping town,
blinking red lights
sway in the winds,
casting an eerie glow
across darkened buildings
closed for the night.

Streetlights are few,
but here and there,
the ghostly blue glow
of a television screen
filters through opened windows,
their muted sounds
carried away by the rain.

Two blocks away
a truck passes through town,
the wail of it's horn
briefly shattering the stillness;
a lonely forlorn sound.

Down a quiet side street,
tucked into a stand of trees,
a soft yellow light glows
from a single window
of a nondescript house,
within sits a solitary writer,
contemplating the portrait
of a small, quiet town
on a Saturday night.

© 5/28/00
Rev. 3/20/2002

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2002-03-22 06:46 PM

You drew a clear picture of quiet and lonliness. Very stark. Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (03-22-2002 06:47 PM).]

wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

2 posted 2002-03-25 12:22 PM

oh, this paints a very surreal picture...familiar and strange at the same time.

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

3 posted 2002-03-25 06:51 PM

Jonas,

I like this, so vivid and clear. I can almost see the street

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

4 posted 2002-03-25 06:59 PM

Jonas: You have described the scene so well! Created a special atmosphere that one can feel while reading the poem.

Betty Lou Hebert

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2002-03-25 08:59 PM

Excellent writing, Jonas! I could see and hear what you were writing about!

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

6 posted 2002-03-26 06:26 AM

Excellent poetry! So real and softly done...ah the warmth and comfort of that small light called home.

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2002-03-31 04:33 PM

I could see and hear your surroundings as you sat and wrote this.

Wonderful, greatly enjoyed

Maree

Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

8 posted 2002-04-02 02:13 AM

Thank you all for reading. I lived in that town for 5 years, and I do miss the peaceful nights there.

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