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Dedication or Stupidity?
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
My husband is a sportsman from his head down to his toes The stuff he'll use to hide his scent brings wrinkles to my nose! He'll dress in green and paint his face to camoflauge his self Then he'll sit for many hours on his little treetop shelf How can hunters stand so still as they await the perfect shot? For to stand in place for hours on end takes patience I ain't got And tell me why would someone want to put a cricket on a hook? Or go to such great lengths to catch a record catfish or chinook? I've seen the average fisherman wade in water to his knees When the sky was overcast and gray and it was thirty two degrees! Please help me find the answer to this question plaguing me Is this really dedication or pure stupidity?  |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Aw but I do detect that not so subtle hint of bliss  Sweetly expressive and great read! Love, MiCheLLe If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues |
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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
I'm sure you'd get lots of arguments about this, both pro and con! Trillium |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
i like your poem. Well done and humorous. One does have to be smarter than the fish. Joyce |
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picturegramic Member
since 2006-05-16
Posts 112 |
I've wondered the same things like how could anyone shot Bambi? Thanks a commical yet insightful read.thanks for sharing, picturegramic :) |
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longte Member
since 2005-04-06
Posts 199Australia |
Enjoyed this A bit of comedy is wonderful And poetry can express that so well .. . |
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kif kif Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 439BCN |
Hello, Alone In The Dark. Haha! a delightful, image-packed romp into marital bliss, and it is bliss, by the warmth in your tone. Plus, you've captured the simplicity of the sportsman very well with your stucture, and easy flow. (Trillium brought up an interesting point-I'm quite into gender specific writing...what you've done here is quite rude, although loving. You've subjectified your husband, like you would consider your dog! As a woman, I'm giggling, yet I can't help think I'd be blah blahing about subjegation if it were a man's poem about his wife! Yet, on 3rd reading, you have used the words "hunter" and "someone", so I'll let it go, although to be perfect in my li'l opinion, I'd like to hear him, as well as see him.) definitely one for the bothy. Thanks for the read. |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
I didn't mean to pick on men. I wrote this as ayoung bride for my husband to make him laugh. It worked. I THINK. |
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Esmeralda Ponsonby Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 138 |
I love this poem, and it is very thought provoking to say the least. I am a woman, and I say it is dedication not stupidity. As you said in the poem you would not have patience to sit there waiting, that sure puts a twist on the saying "patience is a virtue, seldom found in women, never found in men" I never thought about the patience involved before, waiting for the hunt to be had, but it's true there is definately patience exisitng in the hunt. So I would have to ask now, is patience stupid or dedicated? |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Humor is good for the soul and this is a delightful poem! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Alone in the dark, Big Smiles. Although I do tend to favor the idea that for one to go through such extremes to be dedication, you've certainly provoked a most humorous perspective here. Your poem was a lot of fun to read and I enjoyed reading it very very much. -Bob |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Coming from a lonnnngggg line of fishermen and hunters, I can so relate!! How adorably cute this is *grins* ~*Sheli*~ |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
Thank you all for your comments. I'm glad everyone enjoyed it. As I said, it was written in fun, with love. I do believe it is dedication, not stupidity. It was a light hearted (maybe semi-jealous) attempt of writing about what I viewed as my competition! (I was barely 17, and just married)  ^*^Angel^*^ |
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