Corner Pub #2 |
Another World |
Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Another World I came upon a valley, deep And wondered if some creatures sleep, Where shadows never touched by light, Can harbor secrets from our sight. There was no way, that I could see, To reach its floor judiciously. If I went down, I must come back. Rock climbing is a skill I lack. I wandered on, perhaps a mile And stopped to rest a little while. The afternoon was growing late. I camped there, thinking I would wait Until the morning dawned, before, Launching an all-out explore! But sometime in the night I woke. An ancient, mighty voice that spoke From out the depths, froze every bone With fear that I had never known. I lay, so paralyzed with fright, Nor closed my eyes, the rest of night. Just listened to that spill of sound, That seemed to shake the very ground! With dawn, the terror died away. I packed my things and made my way Back to the trail I'd left behind. There's mystery, that some might find, But that abyss, I'd never dare, Although there is a lost world there! Betty Lou Hebert |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
I'd have turned around and left too - as always a wonderful scribe. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
And I would not have stayed in the first place. A wonderful scary piece. Love, Joyce |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ Now you just know this one likes me~ 'Just listened to that spill of sound' And you know me well enough to know ... I'd have LOVED IT !!! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
SPIRIT: I appreciate hearing from you! Thanks! Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Joyce: I wrote this after reading about the "Lost World" in Venezuela, near where Angel Falls is. It really captured my imagination. Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Marge: I had a feeling you'd like this. If we could go together, maybe we'd find out what made all that noise? Thanks. Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Wow Betty, that was tantalizing.. then abit creepy! teehee what an experience Love MiCheLLe If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great piece! much enjoyed! |
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Beasley Senior Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 682Cheboygan,MI USA |
This is so intense and so intriguing! I agree with Marge-loved the spill of sound. I love to lap up what the poets spill! love, Barb |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
MiCheLLe: Thanks! It is a bit creepy, but I was so intrigued by an article I read about a valley in South America, that hasn't been totally explored. This was the result. Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
passing shadows. I'm really glad you enjoyed this. Thanks. Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Barb: Thanks! Glad you liked this. Love Betty Lou |
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Isobel Senior Member
since 2004-01-17
Posts 529Qld, Australia |
Dear Betty Lou This poem reminds me of how we are afraid to reach into the depths of despair. An 'unknown' territory we fear to tread. Are we afraid of what we may find? Thank you for sharing this one with us all here in PiP. Love Isobel ox |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Isobel: Your interpretation of this poem is certainly valid! It could be viewed that way. It is about a place in Venezuela that is like no other place known and much of it remains unknown! Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
I like the last interpetation of this. Thank you for yet another wonderful read. BWA |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wonderful imagery here Betty Lou. Take care.....Sue I am in motion |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
BWA: I'm not as brave as you are! Thanks. Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Sue: Appreciate your remarks. Thanks. Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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