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PassionatelyRomantic
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0 posted 2004-03-18 06:19 PM


oh what it must be to be the day,
and the unloving night be the night;
that in each others own seperate way,
their course may not grace the other's sight.

Oh what it must mean for them both,
that in each other they may not dwell,
for upon a time they took an oath,
to relieve the other upon their own farewell.

But whats more to this that reigns more,
that these eyes may never see thee,
nor in life's own existence adore,
such unforgettable beauty.

For I swear it the night's own affirmation,
that if she were permitted to meet the sun,
from her own ways she would turn in adoration;
and night and day would be united as one!

© Copyright 2004 Jared Lee Dudgeon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-03-18 08:26 PM


OhJared~
This has such a lovely line of thought~
I'd like to see you 'work' it a little more ... it's a beautiful love story in the making~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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PassionatelyRomantic
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2 posted 2004-03-18 08:40 PM


thanks maybe I will... hehe i wrote it tonight after a long grueling day of school :P  my brain is fried I will look into it later
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3 posted 2004-03-18 10:20 PM


Passionately Romantic:  Waht a novel idea and I think Marge is right.  You could develop this even more!  Although, I do like it as it is too.

Betty Lou Hebert

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4 posted 2004-03-21 07:40 PM


awesome write!
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