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junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

0 posted 2004-01-19 04:14 PM

First attempt at this style so forgive me if it is not up to scratch !!. I so enjoy trying new styles.

hugs from june xxxxxxxxx
Come wander with me to the beach tonight

Barefoot over silvery sands

Across tide whipped whirls of creamy white

Come wander with me to the beach tonight,

Hold hands with me , we are lovebirds in flight

Rushing to embrace the ocean

Come on sweetheart, to the beach tonight

Let’s free our hearts with motion

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2004-01-19 04:26 PM

Must say, you did very well
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2004-01-19 04:39 PM

Good job June. Has a nice romantic feel. Love, Joyce

Isobel
Senior Member

since 2004-01-17

Posts 529
Qld, Australia

3 posted 2004-01-20 05:01 AM

I too am new at this as well. Only recently I have found out how to Post Reply instead of emailing. I liked your poem.

Shereen
Member

since 2004-01-05

Posts 57
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2004-01-20 10:51 PM

I think you did just fine - I am partial to the sight and sound of waves hitting the shore anyway (and in the moonlight...)how beautiful. Good job.
Shereen.

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

5 posted 2004-01-25 01:40 PM

thank you all for such lvely comments. i will keep trying

hugs from june x

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

6 posted 2004-01-27 12:59 PM

Mmm, yumm, hehe.. That's such a romantic poem June.. I love the "whipped whirls of creamy white" and the last line is.. the last line is perfect..

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-02-22 10:23 PM

yeah! makes me wanna go to the beach!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2004-02-28 02:50 PM

(big angel hugs) Awwwwwwwww, this is soooooooo romantic, sweet friend, I dream of having my future wedding on a beach so I can feel the earth at my toes, yay! (sigh) God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet June, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

9 posted 2004-02-28 03:03 PM

Dear June,

Alright I'M COMIN I'M COMIN!!!

very, very nice!

Love
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

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