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Sparticus
Member

since 2003-11-15

Posts 245

0 posted 2003-12-03 12:34 PM

Love's pathway through
Orchids straining the sun's glare:
blinding to puddles.

Words tossed like spit
often, if not always, end
up on my face.

You...forgave me, I
still rumble in the wrong
like Sunday's bells.

What do you mean to me?

All things my hands have held,
eyes seen, heart wanted, soul sent.

May I say it? I love you.

This is three senryu, a katauta and a mondo at the end.

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

1 posted 2003-12-03 01:38 PM

Sparticus: Beautifully done, whatever the form!

Betty Lou Hebert

Sparticus
Member

since 2003-11-15

Posts 245

2 posted 2003-12-03 02:11 PM

Thank you Betty. I do so appreciate your hard work here as Moderator.

Sparticus

Even with insects-
some can sing
some can't

-Issa
http://www.geocities.com/amanaman3/Jessepoems.html

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2003-12-03 11:38 PM

Jesse~

'What do you mean to me?

All things my hands have held,
eyes seen, heart wanted, soul sent.

May I say it? I love you.'

Another big SIGH from the South~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2003-12-03 11:44 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, you are so versatile with so many beautiful forms of poetry and the ending to this blossomed like a rare flower in an enchanted garden! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jesse, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

5 posted 2003-12-04 04:13 AM

Beautiful! Words that would give life to the one it's intended just to know they are cherished that much. Lovely, and so full of heart.

Love,
Terri~

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

Sparticus
Member

since 2003-11-15

Posts 245

6 posted 2003-12-04 10:11 AM

Thank you Marge, Noel and Terri. Those terrible slips of the tongue at wrong moments...I was born in the year of the Monkey...I think that causes our mouths to be mischevious.

But I do love her!

Sparticus

Even with insects-
some can sing
some can't

-Issa
http://www.geocities.com/amanaman3/Jessepoems.html

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-12-06 03:54 AM

very cool!

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

8 posted 2003-12-06 06:39 AM

This sounds from the soul Sparticus, such a pleasure to read. Maggie

Sparticus
Member

since 2003-11-15

Posts 245

9 posted 2003-12-06 08:29 AM

Thank you very much, I am glad you guys enjoyed this...I love mixing up forms.

Sparticus

Even with insects-
some can sing
some can't

-Issa
http://www.geocities.com/amanaman3/Jessepoems.html

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