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The Sound...(For my daughter)
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The Sound...(For my daughter) |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
A sound moves up the carpeted stairs past the light blue painted doors to the bathroom. The light stings like strong bleach and you hear the closing of its eyes to steady its tired body as the rhythm of sleep beats in steady breathing. The mirror is veiled by worn age looking staring, dreamily remembering the day a baby daughter stretched into this world like a worm crawling through her mother's body. The bullet path moves by in a blur until she is grown. The sound has done this walk up the stairs and peered into her room, guarding her from night invaders taking away her dreams, every night strode in, listening to the breathing until the blur grew brighter. All the nights it labored and days it slept her away. It would give back all its sleep, to have her young again. The mirror is veiled but doesn't lie, the face worn to ashes and pulsing veins where the fire once burned where the sound is just a ghost of I. Even with insects- |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
What an incredibly powerful poem of love, Sparticus...thank you so much for sharing a piece of your heart. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you, J.C. And welcome to the PIP! Sparticus |
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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sparticus: This is a very moving and complex write! I never thought of sound as a "presence" before, but I will from now on. Thank you for sharing this with us! Will look for more from you! Trillium Betty Lou Hebert |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
I work nights, getting home in the dark, climbing those stairs. That is how this was inspired. Thank you for the response, I have many more to share...all in the appropriate time. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Oh those night walks just to watch over the little ones. Watchful of these precious little ones, keeping care of their well-being. Momma's, and daddies keeping a vigil at times when they are sick, too. This was bourne of sweet loving caring feelings. Very nice.  Love, Terri~  |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
incredibly sensitive write, i like forward to reading many more like this. excellent !!! welcome to the corner from me too :0) xxjune xx |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you Terri and Junemac for reading and your responses. I very much appreciate my work being read. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhJesse~ I have known the sound of sound in quiet vigil of the night~ This moved me to a teary remember~ So blessed am I to know you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you so much my dear friend. I really am glad that you enjoyed this too. Marge you are so good to me. Jesse |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I work nights too...I enjoyed this piece and will click it into my library for future reading |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you, Shadow, for reading. Working those nights...I have done it so long that I don't even remember Prime Time! Sparticus |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Very good. Been there, and time goes so fast. Too fast. Deb |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you kindly for your response to this poem, it was a very fast time for me too! Believe it or not, I am ready to begin again! Sparticus Even with insects- |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Spaticus, what i would like to have said has been said. This is beautiful and such an enjoyable rtead. Maggie |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I am only twenty but dream in the future of having a family and getting to look through my children's eyes and see the spirit of the child in me and cry in joy reflecting on it! (smiles) I love this, sweet friend, your daughter is so blessed and lucky to have you and will tear in joy reading this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jesse, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you, Maggie and Noah...you both are such great parts of this PIP place I really am happy to be part of it. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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Insomniac Cat Member
since 2003-09-23
Posts 69The Land of the Dadaists |
Sparticus, I like your poetic style. I enjoyed this greatly! "I am the hobbyhorse. I am the stapler in the mud, the toad in your brain. I am a head full of birds, a future full of apples." |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you, Cat. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Just perusing the archives of PiP ... finding that I miss your gentle tellings~ Also popping in at your web site ... nice to see you my friend~ *Huglets*  (yeah ... I still got lots of these) ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you my dear friend. I have been away from poetry for a spell, but once Summer has passed and I am back in a schedule with a new step son in my life, I will be writing again. Yours, Sparticus Even with insects- |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
i wonder how I missed this on. It is an old story of love, well told. Joyce |
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