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The Long Dance |
cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
The Long Dance I danced the long dance through my formative years. Walked tall in search of a dream. Now out of step, my dancing is done, I stumble into oblivion. I clawed my way out of oblivion. Danced all day long in the sun. Realised my dreams, To be peaceful, serene And a fervent belief in my God. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Cusick~ 'Now out of step, my dancing is done, I stumble into oblivion.' This verse was really a clever usage of rhyme~ Enjoyed the read~ Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Peace, and serenity in this busy world isn't an easy task that's for sure. You have found that... Very nice! Not long ago I read another one of yours and I said I was going to enter one that's like yours, but I can't it's too long. So I am working on shortening the poem. SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Thank you very much for your comments Marge and Shararose I do hope you can shrten your poem I find it it is very difficult to edit once I thinl a poem is complete.Maggie |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
I like your style. Keep them coming.. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
It's never too late to get back in the dance. Joyce |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Thanks Pagasis and Joyce. Maggie |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
I like this very good write keep them comming. THANK-YOU |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Thank you Tequillia for you reply. Maggie |
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