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“of whiskey & water” |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
I walked along the river today overflowing its banks and purging itself of deadwood and debris the current was treacherous swift so out of control despite its inevitable destination just a “roaring drunk” trying to go somewhere anywhere the way I am most of the time these days and then I saw the beaver paddling his way upstream sticks in his teeth sure and determined to dam up the flow a slow and steady builder astride a wild and raging deluge of confusion and the Great Spirit told me in my heart that he was me just trying to get sober "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." WFS [This message has been edited by coyote (07-01-2003 09:52 AM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Billy this is great.. enjoyed. Nice to see you posting m'friend ![]() Maree ![]() |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks for reading, Maree. Just recently got it straightened out. Thanks to you, again. Billy ![]() "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." WFS |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool write |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Passing Shadows. I like your screen, it makes me think of wild geese fying overhead. coyote "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." WFS |
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BrokenWingedAngel Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 60 |
The imagines this brings to mind are .... wonderful ![]() Thankyou ![]() BWA I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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TheGoalie Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 47Poughkeepsie, Ny/Long Island, Ny |
I liked the images in this poem, and I can definately relate, having just recently celebrated my 21st birthday. Good write. "Ain't Got no quarrels with God, ain't got no time to grow old. Lord knows I'm weak, won't somebody get me off of this reef" |
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Lady In White![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Excellent, Coyote. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Great write. I've been to that river. Melton |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks for reading friends. And for hearing. God Bless ya. coyote ![]() "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." WFS |
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wild irish Junior Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 31 |
I love it, stay swift, hang tight, let loose, that you might. www.rateapoet.com |
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abbe Member
since 2003-01-20
Posts 131michigan, usa |
i really think we stone cold sober people are often just as confused as the drunk.as we still struggle to plug the damnable flow... i really identified with this... thanks. |
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Joyce Johnson![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Vivid imagry here. Very well done. Though I don't have that particular problem, we all do have debris to unload just like that mighty river. Enjoyed. Joyce |
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perseph1ne Junior Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 16IL |
I've recently been in a writing class and told to use more metaphors/metaphoric language in my poetry. Thank you for showing me a perfect example. Perseph1ne "Words are, of course, the most powerful drug used by mankind." |
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