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aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2003-06-15 09:03 PM

Note: Please help me with grammars.

Two Balls, One Camera

Two balls, one camera,
Seem to be plain,
Seem to be left unnoticed
In everyday scene.

But when I put lights
Staring at the big ball,
All of a sudden,
The smaller ball seems to be
Even smaller like the planets
That revolve
Around the brilliant sun.

When the light is bright,
Contrasting with shadows,
It reminds me of sunset,
And morning of dawn.

When the light is so fierce,
The two balls are like lights' reflection
Of the sun and a prism,
Lovely calling out color of the rainbows.

Pictures composition,
Paintings creation,
All are but minds of
Refreshing souls,
Giving new perspective,
Making old be new.

Amazed by the motion picture.
Each performer
Has infinite talents
To disguise
And be best yet of their
Devotion and creativity.

Motivational speakers,
Oh I do admire
Their efforts and bravery.
Oh how they get my attention
And laughter at the same time.
How wonderful are their speeches
Which changed many who give their ears.

Dancer of the stage,
How grateful we should be
For your good memorization,
Calm postures and body co-ordinations.
How gracefully you paint
A story to our mind.

Singer of all corners,
How impressed we are
That in songs you convey
Feelings more than just words.
How precious are the sounds
Of your comfort words.

Instrument players,
How you make songs special to us
Is a question of time.
How amazed is your efforts
In mastering your crafts.

Last but not least,
Poets and poetess,
How great is your
Mighty pen.
One word from you
Can change one's beliefs.
How great are philosophizers,
Who must know
The power of words.

But behind all works,
Are our choice of perceptions.
Sometimes one is rich or poor
Is just a perception of mind.
And mastering capturing
Perceptions are our strengths.

And mastering capturing
Perceptions are our vision.

(c)June 15, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.
~Yesterday insult, today gain.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (06-15-2003 09:13 PM).]

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2003-06-15 09:27 PM

Dear Eliza, I could make a few corrections in your grammar but your fractured English is so much a part of the charm of your poetry that I hesitate to impose my corrections. This is a very perceptive poem. Joyce

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

2 posted 2003-06-16 11:09 AM

Aww Eliza,

this is lovely! i esp. like this

And mastering capturing
Perceptions are our vision

Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

3 posted 2003-06-16 02:47 PM

Eliza: Very interesting thoughts in this poem! Don't worry about any slight imperfections in grammar! Your poetry has a uniqueness, all it's own and it wouldn't be the same, if everything was perfect! It's always charming and shows part of who you are and how you think! That is the most important thing.

Betty Lou Hebert

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