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aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2003-04-24 02:31 PM

Come out of Pencil Box

Searching in the list of things I written down,
None I can find, my passion deep in blood.
Not one subject, not one man, I'm interest in
Working hard to attain perfect satisfaction.

Help me... to become a poet
A poet that love to read, love to spend
Years and days to learn the craft.
Help me... to become braver
Braver than yesterday, to step outside of
Of my pencil box... (of my pencil box)

Searching in the list of poems I written down,
None I can find, satisfying to my thirst.
Not one subject, not even writing, I'm interest in
Going over all the manuals and standard tests.

Help me... to become a poet
A poet that love to read, love to spend
Years and days to learn the craft.
Help me... to become braver
Braver than yesterday, to step outside of
Of my pencil box... (of my pencil box)

(speaking)
Step out of your pencil case,
The clock is clicking and there is no time to waste.
Step out of your personal shell,
There isn't anything that you should be afraid of.
Step out of your old self on count three,
When that is done, you are new person with new skin.

Help me... to become a poet
A poet that love to read, love to spend
Years and days to learn the craft.
Help me... to become braver
Braver than yesterday, to step outside of
Of my pencil box... (of my pencil box)

(c)April 24, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2003-04-24 03:05 PM

Dear Eliza, Just be glad that you have come so far at your young age. We are our own worst critics and I know I have read some of your poetry that I would be proud to have written. With love, Joyce

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

2 posted 2003-04-24 04:26 PM

what a compliment! Thanks Joyce

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

jaysh
Member

since 2003-04-16

Posts 133
IL, USA

3 posted 2003-04-26 08:44 PM

yeah that really was a great poem, I love reading your poetry, and this one is one is great, keep writing!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-04-26 09:18 PM

Eliza, this is a very good poem. By the way,
I feel like this all the time. I know
that I'm not nearly as good as I wish I was.
I've noticed something, though, some of the
greatest writers on PIP talk about how they
can't say what they want to. Have you
noticed? Just keep writing, and we'll keep
reading.

Hugs,
Ethel

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

5 posted 2003-04-26 09:27 PM

Thanks Ethel

Thanks for reading my poem.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

6 posted 2003-04-27 06:10 PM

oh yes, i know the feeling, and wow !!!!! what imagination. i enjoyed this very much.

hugs x june x

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

7 posted 2003-04-27 06:14 PM

i loved this poem. wow !!!!! what imagination. and i do know that feeling too.
i really enjoyed this one.

x june x

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

8 posted 2003-04-27 08:29 PM

thanks june

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

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