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WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2003-02-07 03:07 PM

Is what you want from me now
the very blood in my veins,
you took everything else
right down to the pain,
the sorrow, the loss,
the agony I need feel,
you took it away
in your quest to be real...

comforting...pathetic
with a touch on my skin
thinking this, just this
would heal me of sin,
as if corruption could ever
God, where to begin.

You took the soul that resided
the dreams I confided
all the fantasy I gave
you took , and you took
until nothing remained,
leaving a shell, empty and barren
you did all of this
with some perverse sense of caring,

and I, what's left
made of stone, bereft
am no longer able to breathe
for my grief you can not now
nor ever relieve.

You've never forgiven
so the life that I'm living
is perilously close to it's end,
will that be my redemption then.

WhiteRose 1/07/03

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2003-02-07 04:21 PM

Let's hope not White Rose. Very poignant. Joyce

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2003-02-07 07:46 PM

Dear poetess, it sounds to me as if you should take back all that has been taken from you...own what is yours...what makes you, you. Very deep write. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

3 posted 2003-02-12 08:47 PM

It would appear to me if you had been left barren and empty you couldn't write like this. You give a lot in your writing. I liked.

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

4 posted 2003-02-15 07:15 AM

Rose; You have described my pain as well...I know just this terrible loss, but have found peace in that it all was the others terrible sickness and loss and not mine to take on...this set me free to be me...Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-02-20 12:55 PM

chin up, friend! You are loved.

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