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nEfaRius
New Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 5
sweden

0 posted 2002-12-16 02:50 AM

hey you guys, im new here, so before i write down my poems, just wanted to say, please do criticize me, good ore bad dont matter, thanx =)

      ***

   The way
   the sun
  lights up
ur darkes side
makes me quiver
It doesnt matter
how cold you are
  i still see
something alive
inside of you..



       ***
    You smiled
and in the moonlight
     u were
     special
  Goodbye, i said
   and i laughed
      at you
  you just jumped
  into desolation
Im sorry, i whispered
   tears running
   down my cheeks
   I learned that
  sorry isnt enough
     sometimes

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

1 posted 2002-12-16 02:59 AM

Yay, I get to be the first to reply. ^_^ Welcome to Passions! And may I say those are very intriguing poems you have there.

Have you thought about titles?

The first is my favourite I think. Seeing good in the dark..

Well done
-Lynne

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

2 posted 2002-12-16 05:30 AM

Welcome to Passion!

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

3 posted 2002-12-18 03:03 AM

WELCOME TO OUR FAMILY nEfaRius!!
That was an astounding first, keep it up!

Lots of Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2002-12-18 04:39 AM

hard lesson to learn...you're right. Welcome to Passions.

juliet_2u
Senior Member

since 2000-07-23

Posts 1125
North Carolina

5 posted 2002-12-18 05:53 PM

Welcome to Passions. I must agree that sorry is often not good enough and sometimes comes way too late.
Juls

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2002-12-18 06:14 PM

Very nicely done...and a big Welcome to Passions!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~

nEfaRius
New Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 5
sweden

7 posted 2002-12-19 01:32 AM

*happy*

thanx ya all, your really great =) ...ill be comin with more work soon...

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