Corner Pub #2 |
You Own Them |
Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Flouncing in your regalia Passing shops along the way Your behavior states you own them without a single word to say Shlepping up the byway Rodeo Drive beneath your feet Bounding with elan with not a single bite to eat Attitude exuding Oozing condescension The peasants scramble for the crumbs you lost in idle concentration The chaufer's never far In fact,he's right there at your heels Voila! At your command on highfalutin wheels Bouncing up the boulevard Card within your grasp Spewing loot like venom like a self-indulgent asp Do you ever stop to wonder why the scales have tipped your way? Your behavior states you own them without a single word to say [This message has been edited by Street Heart (11-06-2002 07:39 PM).] |
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smitty-j Member
since 2002-09-13
Posts 72Florida, USA |
I really like this. Well crafted with a great flow and I can't help but picture a skinny, bouffant haired woman with a mass of face paint and high heels, maybe even carrying a terrier..lol Julie |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
That's really funny that you say that,Julie, for that is actually the picture I had in my head!I didn't think of the dog,but I can see that .Thanks,Julie Geoff |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
...and these are the poorest among us and they don't even know it. Great piece of writing, Street Heart! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
StreetHeart~ Dynamic imagery entwining the characterization in this piece~ Vivid snapshots that came to life~ Enjoyed muchly~ ~*Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I echo Denise...."the poorest among us " indeed! A great write Geoffrey.. as usual Maree . |
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alterego Member
since 2002-02-23
Posts 113Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
I can see this (ROFLMAO) sssoooo vividly!!! Thank you for a picture-pick-me-up this afternoon. A good reminder never to become so self-absorbed as this one was. Sheila Create something infinite today - Smile!!! |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Thank you,Denise.You are right,but they would never see nor admit it. Thank you,Marge,for liking this.A little different from my usual write. Geoffrey |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well done, Geoff. I remember Rodeo Drive. What I saw the last time (1989) was this reality: Two 'uplifted' faces over tight turquoise tank tops and bright white tennis shorts, sporting nifty new Nikes underneath gaudy gold ankle bracelets. And they looked as lost as their souls. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (11-10-2002 10:04 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I've never been on Rodeo Drive but your words have given me a clear picture of some of it. Thanks Joyce |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Thank you,Maree.Will be in contact. Thanks,Sheila.You know,someone explained ROFL to me,but you added some letters there that I am not familiar with.I'm relatively new to comps and comp language,sorry .Glad you enjoyed,though |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Hey,Kacy,it sounds like you've been as many places as I!Never made it to California,though.I've heard and have seen enough to give me a pretty good understanding of the scene. Thank you,Joyce.How was your trip? |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Geoff~ This is a powerfully penned piece and with such an important message as well. Very well said, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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