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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Holding On? Walking the usual path steps precious, unsure blind to extraordinary. Head down in thought contemplation, examination who am, where, when, searching. Seeking the once guiding light undeserved, oh undeserved where is the way, the quide? Every step measured, watched who is this, that...questions stumbling,the way lost? Leaves chase each other breeze teasing, driving quick taste of daily day. Here, how, what, where mind swirls in bits and pieces leaves gently nipping defeat. Nearly autumn, this life walking tomorrow or next narrow path, stepping aside. Praying again for someone to nudge back onto true friend, where are you? What is there to show, tell counting the leaves again wasted days, they swirl on. Light once searing, now dim seems out of reach, can't quite no answers, no answers, none. Moments melting together make a path running beside tastes of fall, forest leaves. Holding onto promise, light clutching once known friend but, will He hold onto me? ~~~~~  |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Sounds as though you're taking inventory. Good idea. Your Friend will certainly hold on to you.Joyce |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Tramp Poet: I enjoyed your poem, though it does have a melancholy air. I think most of us react that way to autumn. Betty Lou Hebert |
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CHILI Member
since 2002-09-08
Posts 244 |
Tramp Poet, this was beautiful. I know how it feels to be full of questions and wondering if the life I have lived really had a purpose at all. Everything that comes our way has a lesson in it. The hardest thing I have ever had to do was to look at myself and look at myself honestly. Sounds to me as if you have done that very thing. Thank you for sharing your poem. |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Hey,T.Poet,I just had to tell you how much I really enjoyed this.It isn't often that I read this type of meter...and I really enjoy it when something is cryptic.It makes you study and reread,which,to me,makes my enjoyment level rise.I love word-play too. Looking forward to reading more of your submissions. Peace,Geoff P.S.I also enjoyed your analogy there in reference to being in the Autumn time of your life.This time of year gets to me too. |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Came back to say again how I enjoyed this... and to add you to my library. Thanks again,Geoff |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, as always, Daniel. I can always 'feel' your words. Well done! |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thank y'all for the input! greatly appreciated... |
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Paddy Member
since 2002-09-23
Posts 52Straya |
Of course He will. The question is, will we hold on to Him? haha I liked this piece. The images are great, the message simple and applies to most. Thanks for sharing.  I guess one becomes content with one’s poetry when one opens the book ten years hence and does NOT exclaim, “Did I really write this?” |
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akira Member
since 2002-07-13
Posts 79Idaho |
This is very well written i'm impressed Akira |
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