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Just Be

Roberta Little
Junior Member

since 2001-12-18

Posts 42
beloit wi usa

0 posted 2002-08-26 08:32 PM

Just Be By: Me 6-2-02

Be you.
Be me.
Be normal.
Be weird.
Be shy.
Be outspoken.
Be "different".
Be "cool".
Just be.
Be real.
Be fake.
Be deep.
Be shallow.
Be high.
Be low.
Be "in".
Be "out".
Just be.
Be male.
Be female.
Be good.
Be bad.
Be a looser.
Be a winner.
Be "popular".
Be outkast.
Just be.
Be a prep.
Be a scrub.
Whatever you choose,
just make sure you choose above all to;
Be free.
Be free
to choose to be
whatever you want to be.
Be you.
Be me.
Be free.
Just be.

GOD's greatist gift is LOVE

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

1 posted 2002-08-26 08:43 PM

oooh I liked this, such a cool idea

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

Roberta Little
Junior Member

since 2001-12-18

Posts 42
beloit wi usa

2 posted 2002-08-26 08:53 PM

Thanx Moon Dust. any sugestions? please help me to get better.

GOD's greatist gift is LOVE

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

3 posted 2002-08-27 10:18 AM

Hey I think its good the way it is. Except it seems to me you have missed a few periods
at the end of some lines. I don't know if it was intentonal or not. But if you are interested in learning how to improve yourself you could visit the poetry workshop forum and post some more of your work there. Poeple in there can tell you how to improve your work a little better than I can. there are also sometime workshops that explain how to write different poems and if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask. Hope you find it useful.

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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