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Lonely Teardrop |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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I am a lonely teardrop Falling just for you Can't you see the pain In his eyes of ocean blue? Sitting on a park bench Here beside the bay Still clinging to your photograph Just can't throw it away 'Cause it is all that's left Of the happiness he once knew I am a lonely teardrop Falling just for you I am a broken heart Lost, alone and scared I once knew perfect love Way back when and where Too late to say "I'm sorry" Now that you are gone Too late to say "I love you, I know that I was wrong" You turned and walked away Like you never even cared I am a broken heart Lost, alone and scared I am a whispered prayer Of this half-broken man He prays that he will one day Find true love once again He asked God above To please take his tears away To leave your memory here On this park bench by the bay To take this broken heart And make it whole again I am a whispered prayer Of this half-broken man I am the gleaming smile Upon this new man's face As he tries to look back To this long forgotten place It was many years ago That his heart was broken here But, he went on to love again When your memory disappeared He tries to remember But, you're gone without a trace I am the gleaming smile Upon this new man's face < !signature--> All my love, Jeffrey [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 06-28-2000).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I like the way you wrote this Jeffrey...the heart break and the moving on....life is like that. Well done! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, Well, you know what I think but I will say it anyway!!! I LOVE IT!!!! In my opinion. it is one of your best my friend.  Excellent work. The end is perfect!!  Lone Wolf Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Jeffrey* Your work has grown to amazing heights, this is a wonderfully written piece with saddness and imagery that touches my heart~ Breath taking work...your gift to weave is amazing! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thank you Martie....Glad you liked it Lone Wolf, aka Jenn, Thank you m'friend you are far too kind I forgot to check the submit box when I posted this....silly me  All my love, Jeffrey |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Sorry bdc I missed you ....guess you replied while I was rplying or something like that LOL WOW!!! Your reply took my breath away Thank you very, very , very much All my love, Jeffrey |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
Jeffrey- I must agree I LOVE THIS! I think it's one of the best that I have ever read...bar none! You have a beautiful flow going throughout the whole poem. I do adore the ending. This is so heartfelt and precious. Thank you for sharing it my sweet friend...  love & all, -Holly |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Hi!! Me again!!!! Just had to come back and vote for this!!!  LW Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
a great statement on what can lie in one's power. The poem itself has a great power of compelling conviction. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a good'n, Jeffrey...  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jeffrey~ This lady really likes this one ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
jeff what can I say but wow. really like this one it hits home really hard. very touching and well written. P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
Had to vote for this! I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of. Michel de Montaigne |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is life...learning from the pain...moving forward...looking back and growing...wonderful |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow Jeffrey....you have absolutely taken my breath away...hauntingly painful and then such glorious revival....a work of art you have here. *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
O la la  I like this one very much Such talent you have .. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Holly, How does one thank someone for such a compliment? You have just found a new best friend  pst!...the check isin the mail LOL Jenn, Awwe...thanks Prometheus, I just love the way you add your words of wisdom to all your comments Nan, Thank you your highness Marge, Thank you, I'm glad you liked it epoet, Thanks for the "wow" New best friend (Holly) Thanks for the vote Paula, You hit the nail on the head Krista, You have just managed to put a huge on my face, TY Cocobaci, LOL O la la, I love that Thank you for the smile Again thank you all for simply reading this much less taking your time to reply. I feel as if I have known all of you my entire life. Passion's has given me a freedom like I never had before, A chance to share my hopes and dreams. I truly feel at home here, Thanks to all of you. All my love, Jeffrey |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Nice powerful poem, very sweet and reminds me of many times when I have found someone so special . Thanks - I loved it . L.of.L. Tom . Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh I'm so glad you've chosen this is a book submission Jeffrey ... I believe this might be my favorite of yours so far! Beautiful flow ... lovely sentiments, really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I liked the progression...from starting out sad to ending with happiness...this is the progression of life...when we are caught in the grip of sadness we think happiness has left us forever...but it will reappear and put a smile on our face....James |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
and what a lovely smile it is to Beautiful writings Jeffrey Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Nice written!!!!! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is a great testament of life, like it much |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
AWESOME --- YOU ARE!!!!!! so is this poem--SONG!! i keep telling ya darlin' get that guitar and go for it later-travis tritt-gator LOL jm |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Tom, TY I'm glad you liked it Kit, It's one of my favorites as well, and the funny thing is....It just flowed out onto the page TYJames, Exactly the message I was hoping for Tracie, TY vandana, TY corazon, TY And finally Jan-Gator....You are always so sweet to me Thank you for that Thank all who read and replied to this and everyone who voted for it. All my love, Jeffrey |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Lonely and sad, but beautiful!! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Why, thank you RH All my love, Jeffrey |
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