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| Open Poetry #8 |
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Beware the Gambling Vice |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Sometimes I feel I use too many words and tend to be a bore, but how much ever I try, I fail to keep control... here again is a prime example of too many words ... hope that they are not misplaced ... - Gambling - Destiny's Dreadful Game - A forlorn old man, sat stooped in the nook, Stared listlessly with sunken hollow eye, The other street, he faced with a sad look, As he shrunk into pitiful state, I let out a sigh. Startled by the sigh, his doleful eyes blinked, Looking up, he gave a momentary glance, Probably thought, 'Another God-forsaken stink', "Excuse me, sir", I said, taking my chance. "What ails you, Sir, what darkness does haunt?" "Pray tell me your gloom's source, its root" "And what I could do, to ease sorrow's taunt?" "Please, if its not too much trouble to boot." Sideways he glanced, towards a street window, There stood a beautiful body, under a red light, The other way he looked, at a broken bungalow, A young man, smoking weeds under dimmed sight. Upwards he looked at the pale evening sky, Shallow promises were made on a black yesterday, Then he turned, gazed at me with tearful eyes, And I touched his shoulder and sat to hear his say. "Oh, a lanky young man was I, once in the bygone time" "Swell days were those, when the sun shone bright" "Divine, youthful, carefree pleasures ever so sublime" "A pint of ale, a fair share of wheels, Hendrix felt just right" "With no sense of fear or worry, I married a fair angel" "Fathered two sweet kids, a lovely girl and a handsome boy" "Little did I know my feel for gambling, would strangle" "Snuff out my family, kill my wife and throttle all joy" "Today, with nothing left to do but beg for a dime" "With no purpose except awaiting death, biding time" "What could hurt more than to see my lovely daughter" "Sell her self to vagrant men, bearing false laughter?" "What could break a heart more than to see my son" "Whose young life wastes itself amid drugs and guns?" "And you, young man, wish to get me out of this hole" "And save this wretch, who gambled away his soul" "Please go away, never come back, just leave me alone" "But forever remember this face, and behold this eye's tear" "This face that has been scarred by self-indulgence alone" "Fate may wave a friendly hand, but this vice you better fear" - < !signature--> Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-28-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A powerful piece...this is one of the many vices that caused me never to meet my biological father. Thank you for sharing the gift that you have to weave a tale into the shoes of a poem~ |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Sudhir, you often use many words; this is true. I can quite honestly say though, I have never found them boring. Every poem of yours that I have read contains a message. Keep those words flowing  Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Hi Sudhir, Good message. One of my favorite things to do (look forward to) is going to Vegas with a bunch of women once a yr. To make matters worse the gambling boats are getting closer to home, I see a lot of what you are talking about at these places on the occasional times I have the extra money or time to go. Bless you much for this message. P.S.: I DID happen to hit a jackpot and ten percent ($2,000.00), I gave to the church.(Does that count) |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Wow! Quite a moral of the tale here. I, too, love your writing. It's never too wordy by far!  ~Heather |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Butterflies_dont_cry, I hope I did not bring back sad memories... Thanks for reading and your kind words. Eric, Words of support mean a lot... its just that I see so many beautiful poems posted here, each well-meaning but with only the most required words... while I take up so much space to put to words the small little things that I have to say.... Thanks for reading and making me feel better... Marcy, I am surprised that you actually won a jackpot, but maybe thats after you lost a great deal before and even more after... Charity is of course a good thing, but as I say beware the Vice of gambling, its ok as a sport once a year, but please don't make it a bad habit... Thanks for your thoughts and sharing that part of you too... Heather, Thank you from all my heart... regards to all, Sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir, it would definitely be a sin if all your words, you kept, within. {~,^) Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Sudhir -- Boring, you?? Never. Your poems are so eloquent and your word choice is impeccable. This piece was so sad but a tale that many should read. I went to Cherokee Casino last month. I lost three hundred dollars and had to dig in my car seats to find gas money to get home. Lesson learned here. Awesome Piece! --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, Thanks for your ever present support... Means quite a lot... Tennessee Angel, Well, I am glad that you learned the lesson quick enough... I am thankful for your kind words and for reading this piece too.. regards, Sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Sudhir ... such a horrid vice this is to grab so many in it's clutches ... great message, wonderful poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sudhir~ No truer words have been spoken...your words are very wise and I thank you for posting this Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, Thank you for reading... and am glad that you found it to be "wonderful"... Tracie, ...and I thank you for reading and for your lovely response... Regards, sudhir. |
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