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Just for a moment |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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For just a moment Rolling thunder rocked my door, Romped and stomped my bedroom floor. Roaring in and out my head, Rudely got me out of bed. Rain pounded the window pane Each drop hammered at my brain. Skies spoke rapine racy grey, Whispering you are mine today. Raw energy shunted me, Up my feet my legs my knees. Caught me in a vocal roar, Shook me to the very core. Dark and dreary brood its mood, Grumbling, rumbling ugly rude. And I wailed to make an end, Be it devil, be it friend. For a flash I was its goal. For a flash so felt my soul. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow.. this is beautiful and very powerful. I enjoyed it much! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, what a description, never read anything that hits so perfectly....great writing |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Rain pounded the window pane Each drop hammered at my brain. Skies spoke rapine racy grey Whispering you are mine today. Raw energy shunted me, Up my feet my legs my knees. Caught me in a vocal roar, Shook me to the very core. --------------- For a flash I was its goal. For a flash so felt my soul --------------- ya know what Sy-guy??....YOU ROCK!!!!!!! this is the coolest poem... on my BEST day I wouldnt come up with a line like... "rapine racy grey" ...awesome and as ALWAYS...I could just inhale those always PERFECT last 2 lines... these two I could eat with a spoon. later-storm-gator jm baby dont you work so hard for this prize you've found, it will all be gone-when you turn around, cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick Roberts |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LoveBug, Thank you for the read and comment. Corazon, Thank you for the great. Janet, You rock pretty good yourself. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! Fantastic, Seymour! Wonderful writing! Denise |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Fantastic indeed,... hey Seymour, another indredible piece of writing from you, my friend... regards, sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, Thank you so much for th e WOW. *L* Sudhir, Thank you for the nice comment. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A delightful rendention of sight and sound. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ So welcomed are the rains pelting earth from sky ... but when the lightning strikes I run and hide my eyes ! This is a perfectly wonderful piece from the pen of a terrific poet !  I could almost feel the thunderous roar. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow, seymour, what a rush...and I don't think this has ever happened to me...sigh... "kicks just keep getting harder to find..." Smiles to ya. Love your work... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Prometheus, Nice comment, thanks. Marge, Thanks to my favorite poetess. *L* Serenity, Love your comments. *L* |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
Thoughfully written. Congrads. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Seymour~ this is my kind of weather! This is so great! Loved it! -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Danial, Thanks for the read and comment. Sea, Thanks for the love it. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Methinks you've got your very own wonderfully distinctive style as well, dear Sy...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sweet Nan, Sweet Nan, Sweet Nan *L* |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Sensational! I love it. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Eagle One, Enjoyed your comment. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
WOW Seymour ... powerfully written indeed! I could feel it, hear it ... almost touch it (had to look out my window to make sure it was still sunny out there right now). Wonderful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Always had a fear of thunder, don't live in place where it occurs very often, but instead the ground shakes. You captured the raw power of it so well. Corinne |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
WOW!!!! Seymour, this is amazing!!! What imagery!! What power!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Enjoyed your flash of poetic finery, Seymour...always a pleasure. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Thanks for the wonderful. Corinne, Thanks *L* ESP, Thanks for the WOW. Meadow, Sweet comment, thanks. |
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