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China Doll Heart |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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~CHINA DOLL HEART~ I am like a china doll in a gift shop, waiting, longing, for any man to pick me, to choose me for my uniqueness, for the rare beauty that I am, like many other porcelain dolls, I am carefully placed upon a shelf forcefully displayed to the world, but, now while upon that lonely shelf, I long to be picked, long to be touched, long to find a home, for, even dolls have feelings, and need someone to belong to, as many pass by staring, some admiring, some refusing to see me, I seem so strong, so molded together, but, my crystal turquoise eyes fight to hold back the tears, tears that would smear the perfectly applied paint on my porcelain skin, tears playing with the hope that one day I will finally be free, yet, pass me by long enough, and my heart slowly dismantles itself, and this china doll breaks into a million porcelain pieces, unloved, china doll heart, china doll eyes, china doll dreams and china doll soul slowly dies *By Melissa Honeybee* [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My dear china doll; do not wish to become a possesion. Your heart is so true that one will some day come and wish to hold you as and equal. Lovely work filled with many emotions. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well, there is someone out there searching and searching for that perfect china doll...and the day they come is worth the wait. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Melissa, Some Kinght will come your way to break you from these shackles, and in love you will be bound but in life you will be free... as a song bird, as a butterfly...as a beautiful creation...you will... regards, Sudhir. Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
but, my crystal turquoise eyes fight to hold back the tears, tears that would smear the perfectly applied paint on my porcelain skin, tears playing with the hope that one day I will finally be free, yet, pass me by long enough, and my heart slowly dismantles itself, Melissa, a haunting poem, wonderfully written. You are not a doll to be possessed but a wonderful person to be cherished and loved. "but for the lovers, their arms Round the griefs of the ages, Who pay no praise or wages Nor heed my craft or art" Dylan Thomas. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Deeply Touching Melissa, China Doll? If you could see yourself through our eyes, your shining spirit and soaring heart, we bask in the light of your soul with every word you write and we are all better people for having you here. Your Friend Olias |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Melissa~ My dear, I know what you long for, and how badly you need it. But have no fear, when the right person comes along, you will know it, and so will he. He will breathe life into that sweet china doll, those turquoise eyes will have to fight tears no more! Love Ya~  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A most touching poem. Very poignant. How true it is that the most fragile of hearts crave the human touch the most. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Very nice and touching poem....all i can tell you is that it is better to have a soul mate than to be a trophy bride.....it is not enough to have someone love you for your outer beauty....so in short don't be afraid to show your heart,,,,sure you may get hurt but then at least you will know...do i make any sense at all? I hope so......Great poem.  Julie :) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you so much everyone for the kind replies and for the support and the advice, as always it's greatly appreciated and it encourages me And, I am blown away by the sweet comments that you all have made, I don't deserve such compliments, but, hey I'll take them anyways LOL Take care, Melissa Honeybee [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Just wonderful Melissa. . . Finely crafted, just like that doll. . . but, unlike her, you are not meant to be possessed, you are meant to be cherished. . . and one day, you will be my friend. . . by someone who sees your heart and knows it. . . And you deserve every compliment. . . for this wondrful poem. . . it's one of your best. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oh Melissa, this is incredibly sad, especially the last few lines. You are obviously one with equisite beauty and someday someone will come to you who recognizes what a gem you truly are. < !signature-->*Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 06-28-2000).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you Sven and Krista, as always your replies are much appreciated Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow Melis, this is beautiful, sad yes... but laced with a sweet sincerity and honesty of emotion. beautiful images created with the use of the china doll metaphor. excellent writing and expression. take care lovely poet jm you can say baby baby can I hold you tonite maybe if I said the right words at the right time you'd be mine baby can I hold you tonite Tracy C |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Melissa I enjoyed reading this poem..creative use of the china doll. Someday someone will see how special and unique you are...and they will appreciate and admire you...James |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh Melissa, this is a beautiful poem. I'm sure you will be taken off the shelf long before the rest, my friend! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Janet Marie, James and Lovebug, thank you for your kind words Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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