Open Poetry #8 |
despeckling old lady moments |
redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
this needs some work as well, Fingers wintered the reason eyes laugh grey soft desire. Returning fealtys timelessness, to foggy afternoons rosed. Those that are found are loving. < !signature--> Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids [This message has been edited by redheart angrybraids (edited 06-25-2000).] |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
I like. Could it be romantic? Maybe. That is how I absorbed it. I like your style of writing. It is similar to mine, so I can relate to it. Again, I like. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
another lovely moment here, and I am grinning again, redheart, yours is not a simple read, but very much worth the effort. |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i know what you mean, this one just plunked out, and it took me forever to get the tittle, but it is rather romantic, little old lady, rattling her impression, of memory, not realy regretful, but just a little, remorseful. Remembering the goodness over the wrinkles, thank you for reading. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
The first line is exquisite. definitely if you don't feel this is finished, please finish it! but I love it the way it is. Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sig |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i do like it the way it is , though i did add some to it, they could be diffrent poems, however, i got one head, and two hands. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i love it just like it is... nope... doesn't need any work. it's a succinct and vivid piece. Enjoyed much. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh, I like this! A very interesting look into a piece of life...poignant. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
this reads so calming and soothing..perfect ancedote before one slips off to dreamland!! like the message in the last two lines..interpreted it as those who come to terms with themselves and have seeked enlightenment shower their affection and love more |
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