Open Poetry #8 |
One Starry Night ( written with Lone Wolf ) |
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thank you again Lone Wolf for taking the time to write with me I think we are getting better at this collaberation thing LOL One Starry Night The night horizon once aglow with love Not a single cloud in the sky Shining down on me from above As if to sing a sweet lullabye The moonlight warms my weary heart Could this all be just a dream? We promised we would never part Love isn't always what it seems I never knew this road would wind Back to the safety of your loving arms It is only there that I can find A shelter from Heartache and her evil charms Upon me, she had cast her wicked spell And left me there in a teary sea I didn't realize before I fell It would end with me drowning in my misery But, alas, today a new hope prevails A brighter tomorrow awaits you and I Our future together will be unveiled The height of our love surpassing the sky My wish came true one starry night When you took my hand into yours My heart felt spectacular delight When you said you would love me for evermore All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh this is absolutely adorable and loving ~well done! netswan |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent collaboration. Keep up the good work! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Beautiful work...the two of you did a reat job Well done Jeffrey and Lone Wolf Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
netswan, eloise,traciee Thank you for reading and replying Lone Wolf and I always have fun when we write together. It is a wonderful feeling you give us with your sweet replies All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Not bad, Jeffrey...two thumbs up for the both of you Marie~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...a have always believed that finding someone who accepts us as we are will help to heal a broken heart. James |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Marie, Thank you from both of us James, My feelings exactly All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Like wine and roses Like verse and rhyme you two together create poems sublime very very nice you two... you bring out the best in each other... like peanutbutter and jelly LOL later perfect-fit-gators love ya both jm |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
First of all, I have to say it is a pleasure to write with Jeffrey once again. Yes, I think we are getting the hang of this!! LOL. You know I always have time to write with you!! Thank you to all who replied. You keep us going!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I have never tried to write with someone...its great you can combine your talents and create such beauty |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
So lovely you two....I think this collaboration thing is definitely a success with you two! : *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Janet, As far as the peanutbutter is concerned, That would be Lone Wolf , I've always said she was...NUTS Lone Wolf, Sorry I couldn't resist LOL Paula, Thank you, you wouldn't believe the fun we had writing this one LOL Krista, Thank you, we like to think our teamwork is getting better All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Just for the record I have to say the following: YOU'D BETTER RUN FASTER!!!!! YOU ARE IN FOR IT OF I CATCH YA!!!!!! LOL..... All of you who know Jeffrey, know already HE is the NUTS one, not me!!!! Thank you!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Me? NUTS? Oh come now....I'm not the one who...ummm....NEVERMIND LOL All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Yes, YOU, Jeffrey.........don't you EVEN go there!!!!!! Keep running and pray I do not catch up!!!! LOL Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Exellent collaboration Jeffrey and Lone Wolf! Wonderful flow of ideas ... I especially liked the line: "The height of our love surpassing the sky" Sigh ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Hey! JANET Started this .....then runs off and hides LOL You just wait till I see her again LOL Don't make me say it Lone Wolf....Ok, you leave me no choice! I'm not the one who....WHAT?......OMG!!!! PUT THAT BAT DOWN!!!!! All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Don't go blaming Janet now....YOU are the one who said I was NUTS!!! Not Janet.... Come on JM.....LET'S GET HIM!!!!!! LOL Looking for Jeffrey.......BAT IN HAND.... Here Jeffrey....come on out... hehehe |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
SEE I TOLD YOU SHE WAS NUTS!!! Now she's trying to bring poor old Janet into this Huh? What's that you say? No, she would never be able to find us in here Oh! Sorry , I was talking to myself again ROFLMAO All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Janet is safe...no worry JM....between my and Jeffrey!! LOL YOU are talking to yourself and I am the one who is nuts?? LOL....sure... ROFLMAO at Jeffrey!! Boy, he can run fast!! LOL. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
What? You say she's trying to get Sharon to help her find us too? My God! She is insane! First Janet now Sharon? Will she stop at nothing? Oh! Sorry, just talking to myself once again. ********************* Run, run as fast as you can You can't catch me I'm the crazy poet man By the way Kit, Thank you for that wonderful reply All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*shh...I just tiptoed in to read the poem! Very good (still whispering)now I have to go back, the teens don't know I'm out on a furlough! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
HA!!! I guess she won't have Sharon with her (if) she ever finds me LOL!!! What's that? She is? OMG!!! RUNNNNNNNNNNN!!!!!!! (THWACK!) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I never knew this road would wind Back to the safety of your loving arms It is only there that I can find A shelter from Heartache and her evil charms Upon me, she had cast her wicked spell And left me there in a teary sea I didn't realize before I fell It would end with me drowning in my misery a wonderful poem an what a team you guys make. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I will NOT stop until I get you!!! LOL Anyone who wishes to join in the search for Jeffrey may!!! Please!! (whispering to Sharon)...I will get you out of there if you'll help me with Jeffrey. You can run, but you can't hide forever Jeffrey!!!!! LOL....I'll find ya!!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
ROFL Maybe not LW, but I do know a good plastic surgeon! LOL Not that I think you need one ROFLMAO j/k All my love, Jeffrey |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Another fine piece, guys! You two do work well together! I really liked how it captured the self-doubt feeling. Then the 'tickle' in the stomach, that rush, when she takes your hand and you know that you're the one. Oh ya, what a feeling! Keep it up guys, they're great! Trew. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Hope he's a good plastic surgeon!!! ROFLMAO What a job!! Good luck!! I'll still find ya.... Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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