Open Poetry #8 |
1968 |
Sunshine
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1968 Sixteen, once kissed, and summer time memories string by in flight when summer’s long night brings on the wind the smell of sun’s burn and baby oil… remembering back on the day, hot concrete beneath my feet so I ran to shade under cool, cool trees and long, languid breeze off the sea blocks away. LA in summer back to visit, but place of my birth. Traded the concrete for earth. Rebirth. Only in memory do I look back and hear the strain of the refrain “Under the Boardwalk down by the sea on a blanket with my baby is where I’ll be” and knowing it wouldn’t happen but remember wishing I was older so it could if it would because I was sixteen. Ah, memories. 21 June 2000 ©KRJ Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, memories do follow us around, don't they?? you just gave your age away, by the way... |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great piece but i like the second half a little better then the first i think it kind of says more. hope your not mad just replieing form the heart. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Sunshine
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Sudhir, you are so right, and I have no problem giving away my age...I've done it before, I'll do it again...I've lived long enough to be proud enough to say I've survived these 48 years!!! LOL And Jeremiah, you can pick any part of the poem you like, and point out what you don't like, anytime! I'll go so far as to say I would like you to pick out a different icon...but to each, their own. Thanks for your comments... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderful poem. Nice to see that memories are can hold to a soul. What would we be without them and where would we be? As for the age; I am right behind you baby!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I was a few years older than you but I remember it well too! Oh, what great times they were. It was a privilege to live then, many exciting things were happening and it was safe to hold your girlfriend's hand and walk down any street. Some things have changed for the better but many many things have'nt. It was great to read your words Sunshine, I really enjoyed them. |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine, I really like this. It sets a mood that transports the reader back to another world, complete with music playing in the background. Very nice......... |
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Sunshine
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Wow, surrounded by youth and wisdom...how lucky can I be? Thank you both, Mark and ethome, for reading. 'Deer...just one day that I've always been able to recall vividly in my mind...hormones must have been raging!!! Thanks, 'Deer! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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