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The Visit |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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"I have a pain.." Two fingers lift in gnarled extention wrestling 'gainst past strength belied by their own slow stutter to tap-tap-tap 'pon heart "..here." "Must you make my heart swell so?" Simplicity, joy found in origin 'tween young and old for the scented velvet feel of a favorite flower Twirling, the carnation tilted thus and yon over fingered tips of youth in a dance of violet Agile scissors gleam snip echoes stability (green, like the leaves) falls to the floor, crashes for all that can be heard through lonely stranger-filled sterile hallways "Here.." Hands white age unscathed peaceful reach forward, outstretched with prize to pin upon imaginary lapel in defiance mocking the drab of hospital garb "..let me." Eyes yellowed wet and red-rimmed smile twinkling through years of memories fond, then close parchment thin lids with a sigh "I need to sleep, child." A kiss placed just so on forehead here and a turn to leave exit and wake from the nightmare of now Each step, hollow brings a thought a wish for the past his release from pain and a wonder if carnations will forever make her cry [This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
*deep breath* my grandmother....she was a florist, and God I loved her so, this reminded me so much of her, and her failing near the end. *sigh* Thanks for the trip down memory lane, even tho my eyes are all teary now. This was a gorgeous piece of poetry girl!  ~Heather |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Plenty of sighs and tissues here, I'll share...Thank you dear, for such a sweet reply. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My dear, please edit this one so we may vote for it..so beautifully sad!  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Nic... sigh m'friend, for one who doesn't "have it," you sure do! I'm in with Sharonon this... Read it to yourself lady... step back and whisper the words into your own ears. They'll sing the same melody they sang for me. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Beautiful work, a simple act but yet so much is touched by it....a work of art! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Lovely tapestry of verse Beautiful indeed |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you! I'm voting now... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
So sweetly, sadly, poignantly written...wonderful... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Beautifully intricate indeed!!! regards, sudhir |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Very sadly beautiful, very emotional. Well written Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I have to admit I am moved to tears, so powerful but gentle, a wonderful poem Thankyou Olias |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Sigh.....so sad and beautiful. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've painted these pictures and emotions so vividly Satiate ... wonderful poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
A beutiful sweet poem that I enjoyed reading . Thanks . L.of.L. Tom . Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thanks for editing, so that I can vote for this wonderful poem Olias |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I want to thank you all very much for your wonderful replies, they all mean so much! Thank you! Nicole |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Very heartfelt...liked this very much...If I knew where and how to vote I would vote.....someone please e-mail and tell me....Great work here!!  Julie :) |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Satiate, any chance you could pass some of those kleenex this way please. Like Heather, this reminded me of my Grandma and how I used to sit by her side wishing so many wishes. hurry up with the kleenex! *hugs* Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Oh God Nicole ... This was ... Well ... Hugs. My eyes are watering ... must be the allergies ... --Me YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Quite exquisite work. Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So beautifully done and full of such tenderness...wonderful work! |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Sigh...beautifully well written!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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