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My Rose
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My Rose |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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My Rose ~First Knight~ The day began its glory, With clouds of pure delight. Nothing in the forecast, Just sunshine till the night. And events came unseen, Known only to the few. Men of foreign lands, There was nothing you could do. They did not fit the profile, Of what you would expect. They had so many faults, and they never knew respect. They gave you all the hope, Of things they did not know. Liars to the core, They begged you to please "go." They led you on a path, One of pure deceit. Although you still did dream, You never felt complete. But you are the flower, That came from this pot of dirt. No matter how they failed you, No matter how you've hurt. You've risen above it all, Your a dream throughout the land. A pink and precious rose, to be nurtured by this man. It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh big freakin' sighs! This is beautiful, and I believe I must reread it, to grasp all of it's beauty! WOW...I like how you ended such a sad tale, with such a hopeful picture of growth and survival. Bravo sir! "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David~ This is sheer beauty. Such a beautiful 'Rose'. You romantic heart - you ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This flows beautifully First_Knight, and such lovely sentiments ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
They led you on a path, One of pure deceit. Although you still did dream, You never felt complete. But you are the flower, That came from this pot of dirt. No matter how they failed you, No matter how you've hurt. You've risen above it all, Your a dream throughout the land. A pink and precious rose, to be nurtured by this man. ------------ big *sighs* indeed...love a man who will nurture*smile* very beautiful tender, loving poem... loved the comforting, gentleness of the end emotions. very very nice take care, jm And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
HOLD ME BACK!!!!  Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh this is so lovely,..you certainly have a way with words. This is so well done,...so beautiful and uplifting as seeing it (her) make it through. Just lovely. Thank you for posting it. *Peace. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you so much PFF.........I admire your work and to see you read mine makes me smile. Marge....Oh Marge.....you have just the right thing to say at the right moment Thank you Kit and JM LOL at you Irish Thank you Spitfire It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
First_Knight, So romantic.....sigh.....such a sweet comparison between your lady and a rose. I think you have earned your name well. Nice writing!! Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
How do I compare thee? Sweet, beautiful, romantic, and honest poetry! she is one blessed flower |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Why thank you Lone Wolf........ Nice to see you Romantic Heart and thank you....Do tell where have you been hiding? It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
David...somedays I could get lost within the beautiful gardens of your words |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Rise above all ...in this land of deceit..a brave soldier she must be....a rose from a pot of dirt..a rare beauty indeed..thanks for the read.. Sincerely A_L |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Rise above all ...in this land of deceit..a brave soldier she must be....a rose from a pot of dirt..a rare beauty indeed..thanks for the read.. Sincerely A_L |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you lady Ruth....and Amazon It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I have not been hiding sir knight, but I have been on vacation in a distant land, where the ocean meets the sands |
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