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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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There was a time when breath baited lingered in quiet wait hovered to compose melodies soft, whispered the language of night of dreams Contained within want restrained Delicate wings clipped from flight grounded it held to gaze upward a'sky for never to soar harmonies Left to struggle 'gainst past and why Reprieve E'en stale was strength found in breath to sigh through cloudy veils of misconceptions Released in finality Alone - though free to breathe again [This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 06-18-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Ah, to breathe again. --A great poem leading to a lovely end ~netswan |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful! I actually held my breath as I read this....  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
to sigh through cloudy veils of misconceptions Wow Nic. This almost brought me to tears. I have NO idea what this is doing way down on page three, but I am definitely bringing it up to the top! A sad sigh here m'lady, yet you still make me smile at your talent! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well, breathing again sure beats the alternative... though I know at times we both may have questioned that. You know better than to speak of "for never" even so, Nicole. ((Hugs)) for now - with hope for more smiles in the future... Michael |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Breathe........a touching piece, the imagery and feeling in this were amazing, so sad but so very beautiful. You have a gift to weave thank you for sharing it~ |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow....*sighs* This is so beautiful...I am in awe.  *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
netswan, thank you. I was striving for an ending with an upward turn. Sharon, Breathe! You always say the sweetest things. Thank youChris, Thanks m'dear for diggin' it back up. Sad sighs, but hopefully good sighs too, every cloud has it's lining. Michael, we have indeed. Thank you for the hugs m'friend, and a big for ya.BDC, Thank you for such a wonderful reply. Krista, Thank you sweetie. [This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Released in finality Alone - though free to breathe again ......... Lovely poem, very exquisite...and what a nice ending...I am held in awe...instantly reminded of Pink Floyd number Breathe in the Air (only by the title, that is)... I enjoyed this one for sure, Regards, sudhir |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Breathe. . . Just wonderful Satiate. . .simply soft and flowing. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Beautiful! The depth of a sigh is in the length of release...that probably doesn't make sense but that's what coms to mind ^_^ Amanda |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
my breath was halted from the first...I forgot to breathe again til the end..then I read pdv's reply and had to laugh...it affected her exactly the same! Gorgeous work girlie and drat them Lakers anyhoo (shhh *WINK*) ~Heather |
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