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The Journey
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The Journey |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
The journey Together on a journey Where the heart is in control Leading always somewhere Where logic plays no roll Captivated with the freedom That this journey often brings The consequences are forgotten For the moment pleasure sings Giving in to temptation As your eyes begin to glaze Loosing all inhibition In this unforgiving maze As the journey lingers All thoughts run through your mind You want so much to stay If only reality should be so kind You realize the day will come Where someone will pay the price For journey’s such as this one Come with a sacrifice A sacrifice of love The pain of letting go of your lover Knowing from the very beginning He always belonged to another In this maze of many turns With each turn you hit a wall Knowing at any moment Someone may take the fall At times wondering if fleeing Is the best that you could do Thinking that maybe by leaving Things would work themselves through No matter how you look at it There will come a day And the question you will ask Are you going to leave this journey Or Are you going to stay |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is something many of us have to face at sometime or another... you've told the journey well...  |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
you write so we'll and express yourself the same great job. tho i do love poem like this i must inform you i've been gifted to write more darker things but sometimes i write happy things we'll keep up your great work. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautifully done. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow.. beautiful Kat. I liked the ending here too. =) --Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Hi Kat ~ Great Piece here --- Wonderful ~netswan |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You've given this piece life with such questions...nicely writ! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Severn: Thanks, I know that all too well. Jeremiah: Thanks for complimenting my writing. I enjoy all types of works, happy or dark but sometimes when I read poems that are too dark I find I put myself in the position of the one who's writing it and it upsets me, so I try to stay with poems that are not too dark. I've got to admit though, that I will read more of the darker one's when I'm feeling down. Maybe it's not the right time to be reading them, but I do it anyway. Tempress: Thank-you, I'm happy that enjoyed it. Dave: Thank-you, and I'm glad you liked the ending but answering that question is the hardest thing to do. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. Netswan: Hi, and thanks Claire: Thanks, journey's such as this are always moving and questions are everywhere. Glad you enjoyed it. Kat |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
As the journey lingers All thoughts run through your mind You want so much to stay If only reality should be so kind You realize the day will come Where someone will pay the price For journey’s such as this one Come with a sacrifice A sacrifice of love The pain of letting go of your lover Knowing from the very beginning He always belonged to another ........... nice one, kat, enjoyed this one...sentiments aplenty, worded well... Regards, sudhir. |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Sudhir: Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Here kitty kitty would you like some kitty nip! Hi kat I missed you! You should take a journey over here and try some chicken soup I made for you. Bring the next recipe And I’ll get started on the third one. Don’t forget your apron! Nice poem you wrote here Here some smiles for you |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Insect: Third recipe you say, well um, if you take a look at what happened with the second recipe it didn't work-out so well. As far as the apron goes, I will only wear it if it's clean. LOL I'm glad you liked "The Journey" Thanks! Kat |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kat, I really enjoyed this poem, wonderfully written. LOve is indeed a journey, with may high lights and some low points and some very interesting sites to see. Captivated with the freedom That this journey often brings The consequences are forgotten For the moment pleasure sings At times wondering if fleeing Is the best that you could do Thinking that maybe by leaving Things would work themselves through ------------------------ "WE IRISH ARE TOO POETIC TO BE POETS, WE ARE A NATION OF BRILLIANT FAILURES." Oscar Wilde. "A rock pile ceases to be |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Brian: Yes, life is a journey with the highs and lows and in between. I guess if you look at the overall picture it balances out but it would be nice if the majority of life was more highs then anything else. Thanks for taking the time to post. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Kat |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I like this one very much Coco |
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MysticalNights Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 112Oklahoma |
Oh kat.. This is a great piece. Raises many questions about what the outcome of unpredictable situations. Got me thinking about some of my own.. Keep up the good work. |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
I haven't been able to check up on Passions as of late, but I'm glad I could read this piece from you. Your words speak such truth. ^_^ Amanda Shall I compare thee to a summer's day? Thou art more lovely and more temperate, Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May, And summer's lease hath all too short a date. Sometimes too hot the eye of heaven shines, And often is his gold complexion dimmed; And every fair from fair sometimes declines, By chance or nature's changing course, untrimmed. But thy eternal summer shall not fade, Nor lose possession of that fair thou ow'st; Nor shall death brag thou wand'rest in his shade, When in eternal lines to time thou grow'st. So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this gives life to thee. William Shakespeare |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Coco: Thanks, so glad you liked it. MysticalNights: Thanks, it's based on questions that many of us may have in our on lives. I'm glad you enjoyed it Amanda: I'm glad you stopped in and read my poem also. Yes it does raise many real questions that eventually have to be answered. Thanks so much for posting. |
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