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Romantic Poem - Butterflies' Grave
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Romantic Poem - Butterflies' Grave |
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Eskendale Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 17 |
Butterflies' Grave Where are you Star that glows to shine light to two eyes Away like a dove into the clear blue Away like running fireflies Do you feel The sadness that claims the heart of your love A faint flicker of hope only feeds this peal Waiting to hold that gentle dove Is it a dream My sight of beauty forever a dark grave Could I redeem If such a fault not even the mirth of butterflies could save Flowing like quenching rain Can this be only for me Those tears that light up the dreaded pain Take away my eyes from the flame but the fire I can still see Oh please another chance Let us touch once more Let us finish this waltz oh this endless dance We shall love again forevermore |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Welcome to Passions, Eskendale!!  This is a beautiful poem and I look forward to seeing you around these forums frequently!! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Eskendale, Firstly, WELCOME TO PASSIONS  This is a beautiful start over here from you...Have a nice stay here... Regards, sudhir My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Eskendale, well the fact that you can pen such a beautiful piece and with such heart, you have no need to hope for respect. You have mine and will get from many a poet in here. We are not like the other sites that spend more time tearing a new poet to bits instead of seeing the beauty in a poem. Of course we have a section called "Critical Analysis", I don't venture their, but even in their our people are kind and helpful. Welcome and look forward to your talented writing. Parker |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Welcome to Passions, you make a very poetic first impression with this well written piece excellent imagery ... emotionally beautiful. nice to meet you take care, jm  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 06-16-2000).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Eskendale, "We shall love again forevermore" This must be my favorite line. I enjoyed them all, but this one jumped out at me. No matter the ending, it's happy. Well Done and Welcome to Passions! ~Sheri |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This is just beautiful. So heartfelt. I hope you love again....forevermore. Great line!! Welcome to Passions!!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Welcome to Passions!!What a touching entrance, this is a beautiful piece, thank you for sharing this~ |
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