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the dumb luck of being me
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the dumb luck of being me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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On line off-center middle of the road... I miss the buzz the hum of the city the boys in drag were sweet Sidney smelled so heavenly wore tailored Gucci button down and blue silk boxers, (very well...) Musicians, my mates-- comrades of pain and I smile now knowing why drummers are always late my eyes still see best in darkness and I know the secret handshake (look closely) see the flash of green? I know the smug protection of being bouncer's pet... The drinks that flowed so steadily for the price of the dumb luck of being me... Now PTA and civic meetings where the ladies always smile too wide complimentary they think remarking just how eloquently I can speak my mind... (guess I clean up nicely...) So we do lunch and order salad with croutons always too damned big... they get too silly on white wine spritzers, loosened tongues drip curiousity, --breathless-- amused like I'm a bug-- do tell us all about the road... And I push my lettuce around my plate-- I miss the meet of eyes of friends... I want so badly to go home.... [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-16-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Serenity, I definitely know that feeling... ...... I miss the meet of eyes of friends... I want so badly to go home.... ...... A bird might fly high into the sky Yet it will always, its nest and its chirping ways. .......... Many regards, Sudhir |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh i miss setting up at flea markets yuh the boys werent in drag but all the same...nice poem yuh |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
...." i tried to be -- but Im not" ... *winkie winkie* whats that old sweet cliche'... "caged birds wont sing" I know ... you know... later me sweet twin love ya jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ Wow! This is so great! For me, it's being with the other moms that home school up here.....ugh! They are despirately fake.  -SEA |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
I am truely at a loss for words... I honestly love this poem... so vivid! Everything fits together so perfectly. Wonderful amazing work Serenity!!!!!! I loved this more than I can express in words..  :standing ovation : "It was my love that did us both to death. " -Sylvia Plath |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my eyes still see best in darkness ------------- complimentary they think remarking just how eloquently I can speak my mind... (guess I clean up nicely...) So we do lunch and order salad with croutons always too damned big... they get too silly on white wine spritzers, loosened tongues drip curiousity, --breathless-- amused like I'm a bug-- do tell us all about the road... And I push my lettuce around my plate-- I miss the meet of eyes of friends... I want so badly to go home.... --------------- im back did ya miss me *smile* ya know i found myself thinking about this poem all day ... seems I had to wear someone elses skin today and take a drive into the land of the "Haves" ... and I was there thinking bout those crutons...while I was tolerated by those processed smiles-- painted on fake tanned faces...and i just had to smile at the sweet irony... cause for all that they have... they are just as miserble in their skin as us "Have Nots" you know ... I know ... did I mention I love this one *Wink* and your a cute bug by the way  later me twin... going to look for me muse... feel a purge coming on ... damn sure need one... damn muse ... *kiss kiss* It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
So we do lunch and order salad with croutons always too damned big... they get too silly on white wine spritzers, loosened tongues drip curiousity, --breathless-- amused like I'm a bug-- do tell us all about the road... And I push my lettuce around my plate-- I miss the meet of eyes of friends... I want so badly to go home.... wow amazing poem...I am at a loss for words...just wow. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
serenity... This my dear is fantaistic! I almost don't even know what to say. This has inspired me to write one of my own. Funny how we suddenly see that we're not what we used to be. I like being me and I always try to be me. And if people don't like the me I am...... Well, they can Uhhh...well....you know! I so much enjoyed this, Thank You! ~Sheri |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...thanks to all! Yummy lovely compliments-- JM--I thank you twice gemini twin!!! sudhir--a gentle heart you have...thanks... walt--thank you much, I love to hear from you SEA--glad you could relate, I appreciate you saying so. Sorrows--thank you for the grand compliment and especially the rolling smileys.. (I could relate to THOSE...) Brian--wow...I love wow..(ask walt...) Irie---so glad you enjoyed...thank you for replying...Im looking forward to read- ing yours as well. Thanks again, everyone. You made my day. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW, serenity, this is simply amazing All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
S'en, If only we were all this dumb with luck. Awesome poem. Mike P.s. So why are drummers always late?  [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (edited 06-17-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Couldn't let this slide without thanking JC---thank you much kindly...and of course, sqirrel--what a compliment from you! Two even---wait a sec--(serenity hugged her monitor) thank you so much---followed your advice and wrote this one in my own voice...needs much structural improvement, but I do thank you for the great advice... P.S. THe drummer thing? Well I was told on very good authority that it had a bit to do with needing the skins tightened....heh heh heh... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Serenity~ great poem, wonderful read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
this one reminds me of familiar has been gone, i remember those lushes nights of rowdy, serene, and the echo of it lasting in our nights eye. i miss those times all the days. now surrounded by the panty hose gang, i never pay attention. kindly, redheart angrybraids [This message has been edited by redheart angrybraids (edited 06-18-2000).] |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Serenity, wonderful poem! I very much enjoyed reading this... true friends are so hard to make, I hope you can go home soon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to Tracie66!!!much appreciated... redheart--"the pantyhose gang", I like that much...smiles to ya... and "sea"--a joy to hear from you as well... gratitude again... thanks to all, and WOW...made my weekend... hugs to forum... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Serenity, I'm glad I have the dumb luck of being here to read this poem of yours. This is really excellent writing. I really admire someone who can write in this style and do it so well. Hearty congrats |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Some of our best fantasies are memories. Love this one You have done an excellant job Hugs Rich |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Okay, okay, I SWEAR...this is my last... Balladeer... oh i do thank you....I respect your opinion very much...I bow. if you have suggestions, would love to hear them...(it was shaky I felt...) Spike........and I do love typing "Spike"-- something very butch about that, lovely love to you...thanks. |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
"(Guess I clean up nicely)" Well don't that say a lot! I really enjoyed reading this one. I've never been away from home.. always lived here, but I know how you feel now anyway because you described it so well. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A wonderful and enjoyable read Serenity!! I miss the meet of eyes of friends....... Beautifully said!! Excellent indeed. My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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