Open Poetry #8 |
Only The Stars See Me Cry |
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Only The Stars See Me Cry~ A warm breeze is all that holds me on this empty, long, night, embraced only by the cloud's shadows, feeling a deep need to write. A thousand stars dance above me, as does a celestial blue moon, their presence, my quiet comfort, but like you...they will be gone too soon. I wonder what you are doing, who your with and where you are, I'd sell my soul to know ... we were both wishing on the same star. I was only looking for a little peace ... for something kind ... and for just a little while, I believed ... you were that find. I brought this on myself ... falling for my own fantasy, now my heart breaks under the sudden weight of this cold reality. I cant hold you to promises that you never made, yet each passing second I find more of me that I'm willing to trade. I don't wanna be like this anymore ... so emotional, needy and weak, where am I supposed to go with this, you were the quiet comfort I seek. I tried so hard to hold you, to make you want to stay ... how poetically ironic the intensity of my need is what scared you away. Alone again, I sit and hurt and wonder why ... and I cry a tear ... for every star I see in the sky. Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand, come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand. Janet Marie *repost from open 7 for a friend, to help you understand |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, JM, this is exquisite...beautiful, romantic, sad...the whole package. I love it.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ooohhhh girl this is so sad. I can imagine the heart break of the reality. I hope writing this took some of the pain away. Wonderful heartfelt verse. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-29-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM, This was so touching and full of lonliness that I am sitting here with tears streaming down my face. Oh, how we have all been there at one time or another. You have such talent to write from your heart to your pen. It seems nothing is ever lost in the translation. I hope your friend sees the beauty here and makes a wish upon a star. Wonderful writing my friend. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--there is so much honesty and raw feeling in this...it always impresses me how you spread your heart out for us to see...and it is a lovely heart, you know. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Exellcent piece of sad expressions, Janet. I just love it when poet just opens their heart for the world see. Thanks for sharing. Keep wishing on a star, and you'll find someone soon, so that you'll both will smile, under the clear blue moon. Nathan |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A heart in hand, a heart on sleeve, still wet with tears cried at your leave... Quickened, but not born again, in remorse, remember when... I take your strength, believe again... your memory is my life's reprieve... Solemn vow--I DO believe. loved this one JM---impossible not to... smiles across the miles to you... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I don't recall having seen this one before Janet. Thanks for the chance to read...Awesome!!! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Volumes of you here, my friend. 'I cant hold you to promises that you never made, yet each passing second I find more of me that I'm willing to trade.' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great poem Janet I agree with Marge I love the lines "I can't hold you to promises you never made yet each passing second I find more of me I'm willing to trade." Amazing is'nt it, how easy it is to compromise our principles for love The last part is very melancholy and sad but you capture the atmosphere so well.. sitting there on such a romantic night with your heart in your hand and lonely.....it's like the blues baby.......excellent.....ethome.. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janny~ This my friend is an exceptional piece, sad with such longing yet beautiful...well done Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Jan, wow another amazing piece. Thanks for sharing this repost. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
A warm breeze is all that holds me on this empty, long, night, embraced only by the cloud's shadows, feeling a deep need to write. A thousand stars dance above me, as does a celestial blue moon, their presence, my quiet comfort, but like you...they will be gone too soon. I wonder what you are doing, who your with and where you are, I'd sell my soul to know ... we were both wishing on the same star. I was only looking for a little peace ... for something kind ... and for just a little while, I believed ... you were that find. I brought this on myself ... falling for my own fantasy, now my heart breaks under the sudden weight of this cold reality. I cant hold you to promises that you never made, yet each passing second I find more of me that I'm willing to trade. I don't wanna be like this anymore ... so emotional, needy and weak, where am I supposed to go with this, you were the quiet comfort I seek. I tried so hard to hold you, to make you want to stay ... how poetically ironic the intensity of my need is what scared you away. Alone again, I sit and hurt and wonder why ... and I cry a tear ... for every star I see in the sky. Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand, come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand. *************************************** I couldn't choose a favorite line in this one , without the rest no line stands on it's own, but together they make a poem that is as close to perfection as I have seen I can remember a time when I felt this very same feeling, and you have a way of showing all of us that we are not alone. For that I want to say Thank you |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sometimes we make our greatest fears actually come true, don't we?? We dwell so deeply on a potential loss, we enable it to happen... Nice poem here, my friend.. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I brought this on myself ... falling for my own fantasy, this was wonderfully written..can't tell you how it stopped me from breathing a few times... ~~softly Maureen |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
So many wonderful passeges in this heartfelt poem, that could only come from on who has been in love. So well written, I applaud your openness of heart and soul Liz |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
A very sad read Janet you really have the talented ability to captivate the reader beautifully written Rex |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand, come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand." Such a beautifully gentle and tender read Janet Marie. I adored the closing lines ... exquisite! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Absolutely wonderful. The muse is back! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Its like you are taking pages out of my life JM... never say never |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Janet--This was lovely and sad. Your writing abilities just amaze me. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
This speaks volumes Jan!!!!!! I hope your friend will now truly understand your pain. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
JM - an eternal fan of yours I am and this has just emphasised the need to be. Wonderful! jwesley |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Not sure about your friend, but I thank you......................... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh JM, this is wonderful! I can relate to this very well. I know what you're going through, because I'm going through the same thing. E-mail me if you want to talk. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet your expectations are not too high...you only need to find the right one that expects to find a lovely soul such as yours...James |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This one still sings to my heart J.M. a very familiar tune of loves that are never meant to be...doesn't stop us from wanting them though does it!! I KNOW!!!! and of course...why ask WHY!! **AW hugs** cuz this one goes where few can go SS~ Love ya!! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely heartrending, Janet Marie. Very well done! Denise |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, beautifully sad to the tragic circumstances of the heart. Their is so much emotion in this, it just vibrates off the page. Parker |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I felt the need for a bit of Janet Marie today... and JM? Thanks for asking about me... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Awesome how you bring your emotions to our imaginations. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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