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Sven
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0 posted 2000-07-27 08:57 AM


Once upon a time, there was a boy
Once upon a time, there was a girl
She loved him greatly, he brought her joy
He loved her so much, she was his world

Once upon a time, boy and girl met
Once upon a time, they fell in love
Their love was as perfect as love could get
They belonged together like hand and glove

Once upon a time, boy left girl
Once upon a time, girl left boy
He felt lost, heart hurled into the void
She felt used, her heart the toy

Once upon a time, boy meets girl again
Once upon a time, in another place
The cycle continues, never to end
They never forgot the smiles on their face

Once upon a time is wonderful
Once upon a time is nice
The only thing wrong with
                     Once Upon a Time?
It doesn't happen twice. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2000-07-27 08:59 AM


Well said Sven... I hope this is not Once upon a time...

regards,
sudhir

ma miller
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2 posted 2000-07-27 09:17 AM


unless history repeats itself (like we've been told so many times), your last line is so very appropriate ... nice work Sven ...
Poet deVine
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3 posted 2000-07-27 09:50 AM


Sometimes, you can never get back that feeling..no matter what.  
Trew
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4 posted 2000-07-27 10:04 AM


So true, so true.
That fairy tale feeling only goes around once.
An excellent point, well made.

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5 posted 2000-07-27 10:51 AM


"Once upon a time is wonderful
Once upon a time is nice
The only thing wrong with
                     Once Upon a Time?
It doesn't happen twice. . ."

This is very true.  Your first true love always feels like a fairy tale that you struggle to find again in your life.

                         rosepetals25

Marina
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6 posted 2000-07-27 01:39 PM


An excellent story Sven.  I really like the impact of the last statement.  Very true words indeed.

Marina


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7 posted 2000-07-27 01:54 PM


Nicely expressed,Sven!  
* a once-ago love is wrapped up in tissue paper and put away in the heart, kept safely there but not forgotten there. A new love comes, respecting the old and you learn from both * (from one of my poems)
Keep smiling Sven!  


Gossamerwings ;)

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8 posted 2000-07-27 03:37 PM


this is so sad, and wrapped up so neatly with that last line...hugs to you Sveetie!
Lone Wolf
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9 posted 2000-07-27 10:24 PM


Sven,

Thought provoking poem here, but as they say you can never go back.  The only thing you can do is go forward.  I like this one.  

Nice writing.
LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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10 posted 2000-07-27 11:27 PM


Sven*
This is excellent...and so sad.  No, it doesn't happen twice no matter how much you want it or how much you try...goodness knows I've tried!  The one thing that we can hope for is peace in the end...after we heal~ Great work~

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11 posted 2000-07-27 11:47 PM


I enjoyed your simple approach to this tale, Sven. Arguably a warning to your reader to carry love like the tender treasure that it is.  Truer words seldom penned, my friend.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Sven
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12 posted 2000-07-28 08:15 AM


Thank you all. . .

It's true, you only get that one chance in life. . . some of us may have already had it, some of us have yet to. . . but no matter where you are in life. . . there's always the chance for. . .Once Upon a Time. . .

Thank you all again. . .  

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


kitkat
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13 posted 2000-07-28 12:42 PM


So true this story..Now we know why they call it Once upon a time...Somethings once lost can never be founs again.  

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You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King



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14 posted 2000-07-28 12:55 PM


Where would be the magic in "Once upon a time", if it was "A million times over"?
Great work.


"I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel."
~Touch and Go



Sven
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15 posted 2000-07-29 12:33 PM


kitkat, well said my friend, and thank you!!

AniKay, you're right. . . but sometimes, it would be nice!!  Thank you. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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