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Once Upon a Time. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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Once upon a time, there was a boy Once upon a time, there was a girl She loved him greatly, he brought her joy He loved her so much, she was his world Once upon a time, boy and girl met Once upon a time, they fell in love Their love was as perfect as love could get They belonged together like hand and glove Once upon a time, boy left girl Once upon a time, girl left boy He felt lost, heart hurled into the void She felt used, her heart the toy Once upon a time, boy meets girl again Once upon a time, in another place The cycle continues, never to end They never forgot the smiles on their face Once upon a time is wonderful Once upon a time is nice The only thing wrong with Once Upon a Time? It doesn't happen twice. . . -------------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Well said Sven... I hope this is not Once upon a time... regards, sudhir |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
unless history repeats itself (like we've been told so many times), your last line is so very appropriate ... nice work Sven ... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sometimes, you can never get back that feeling..no matter what.  |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
So true, so true. That fairy tale feeling only goes around once. An excellent point, well made. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
"Once upon a time is wonderful Once upon a time is nice The only thing wrong with Once Upon a Time? It doesn't happen twice. . ." This is very true. Your first true love always feels like a fairy tale that you struggle to find again in your life. rosepetals25 |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
An excellent story Sven. I really like the impact of the last statement. Very true words indeed. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
Nicely expressed,Sven!  * a once-ago love is wrapped up in tissue paper and put away in the heart, kept safely there but not forgotten there. A new love comes, respecting the old and you learn from both * (from one of my poems) Keep smiling Sven!  Gossamerwings ;) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
this is so sad, and wrapped up so neatly with that last line...hugs to you Sveetie! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven, Thought provoking poem here, but as they say you can never go back. The only thing you can do is go forward. I like this one.  Nice writing. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sven* This is excellent...and so sad. No, it doesn't happen twice no matter how much you want it or how much you try...goodness knows I've tried! The one thing that we can hope for is peace in the end...after we heal~ Great work~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed your simple approach to this tale, Sven. Arguably a warning to your reader to carry love like the tender treasure that it is. Truer words seldom penned, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all. . . It's true, you only get that one chance in life. . . some of us may have already had it, some of us have yet to. . . but no matter where you are in life. . . there's always the chance for. . .Once Upon a Time. . . Thank you all again. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
So true this story..Now we know why they call it Once upon a time...Somethings once lost can never be founs again. -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Where would be the magic in "Once upon a time", if it was "A million times over"? Great work. "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
kitkat, well said my friend, and thank you!! AniKay, you're right. . . but sometimes, it would be nice!! Thank you. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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