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Darkness Glows
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Darkness Glows |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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All the darkness glows--uneasy, a naughty moon be on the rise... and all the time, you thought you teased me... who knew it would be you, despised... Lyric of your laughter--SLAP. SILENCE--swallowed, now regret. Each word, each itch, foreverafter... He touched me. I cannot forget. For that,a cloud within my eyes, you cannot forgive... a fingernail of slack of sail, I could drift for miles... and wonder what it's like to live... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and all the time, you thought you teased me... who knew it would be you, despised... Lyric of your laughter--SLAP. SILENCE--swallowed, now regret. Each word, each itch, foreverafter... He touched me. I cannot forget. ------------- I could drift for miles... and wonder what it's like to live... ----------- me muse aint coming back if ya are gonna keep showing her up SO damn well  god, s'en this just aches off the page... i could have such poet envy over this one but man, i dont want the hurt. *blowing kisses* in the wind... fill up those sails and find a sunset baby love ya me twin jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be Awake again I can't pretend And I know I'm alone And close to the end Of the feeling we've known ... How long I've been sleeping How long have I been drifting alone through the night How long have I been running for that morning flight Through the whispered promises and the changing light In the bed where we both lie Late for the sky Jackson Browne |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--after re-reading this, I almost took it off the page, realizing how easily this could be misunderstood. Should have known, tho, that YOU would know...smiles and hugs, me twin...thanking you once again for yer support... (guess I was more than a little bit angry at him last night...smile--surprised he could sleep at all with all those bad vibes floating down the hall...)me much better now. |
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Syntax Junior Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 25 |
Very nice work, here, Serenity, though I'm glad I read your reply, because I did misunderstand. Whatever the meaning, the words are crafted very well. Syntax Each instant comes with a price ~ J. Wright |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
For that,a cloud within my eyes, you cannot forgive... a fingernail of slack of sail, I could drift for miles... and wonder what it's like to live... stunned silence... amazing.... WOW!! ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Am I the only one who finds "Whatever the meaning, the words are crafted very well" to be an oxymoron?  Aren't words supposed to reflect, if not try to overcome and surpass, meaning? --especially in poetry! You did that very well here. And I'm glad you're experimenting. You make a young squirrel beam.M. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you, Syntax, for your thoughtfulness in replying... and brian, I muchly appreciate your encouragement...I do enjoy your work as well--and I will try to reply more often. (But always reading...)smiles and thanks. Me squirrel--I'm beaming right back atchya! But I think you so show some partiality-- I understand that squirrels are fond of nuts...much love to ya and thank you...you just keep pullin' me through... |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I enjoyed this poem yet still contempalting it a bit....I think I understand....however I'll save face and not try to explain it !Anyway very nice work...you really know how to say a whole lot with few words... Julie :) |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
aha, i found one that i haven't read, i love the tittle, this is super sweet and sad, reminding me of, far out at sea, with brother wind, and i still feel the earth turning and the spinning in side me, i loved your words as usual, the last verese, beautiful. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
yep! i've discovered a new poet at passions... don't know how i missed you before... a vibrant piece of work |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So many wonderful phrases in this...naughty moon...I love that...many more...so passion filled and strong. Well done, Serenity! |
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