The Storm (please.. let me know what you think)

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Open Poetry #8

The Storm (please.. let me know what you think)

rosepetals25

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0 posted 2000-07-25 11:43 AM

The Storm

The heavy dark clouds force their way in.
Pushing through the calm blues skies.
The wind’s anger growing as it howls.
The distant low grumble of thunder
Creeping closer as the sky eerily darkens.
The rain starts to fall, slowly at first.
Melodic as it lands against the window.
It quickly turns frenzied, thrashing and clubbing
The thunder loudly bellows over head.
The gray enraged sky flashes brilliantly.
Jagged streaks of energy lighting up the horizon.
Creating elegant patterns across the sky
Wind screams and whips through the resilient trees
Then, as soon as the storm ascended
It dissipates, moving its wrath onwards...
And a strange quiet peace settles.
The sounds of belated raindrops falling...
As the sky slowly clears of fury
Revealing a single ray of sunshine,
Fighting its way through the clouds.

A storm just passed through and this is what came to mind

ma miller
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1 posted 2000-07-25 11:49 AM

now that's an accurate picture ... where's my umbrella? ... nice work ...

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2000-07-25 11:51 AM

I am always up for a storm, rosepetals---I liked the slow description here--you really took your time through this--and if ya want a laugh, it is also a wonderful metaphor for a good bout of PMS....thank you...I did enjoy this piece..

rosepetals25

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3 posted 2000-07-25 12:16 PM

MA Miller - Darn.. I knew I forgot something..hehe

Thank you

Serenity - Thank you

And..lol.. you have a very good point.

MMoonchild
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4 posted 2000-07-25 03:38 PM

As the sky slowly clears of fury
Revealing a single ray of sunshine,
Fighting its way through the clouds.

I really loved these last few lines, rose
~~softly
Maureen

Toddles
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5 posted 2000-07-25 03:43 PM

Nice Images; Feel like I was there!

rosepetals25

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6 posted 2000-07-25 08:40 PM

Thank you Maureen and Toddles

Those are my favorite lines to Maureen. That is the best part of the storm to me.. seeing the rays of sun cut through the clouds

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