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The Search For Closure
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The Search For Closure |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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On a faded roll-a-way, she sits with her eyes not still and they roam the room searching walls, blinking, I try to enter her space. After regaining a small trace of strength, the situation starts to ease and proportionately she settles. "You are my true Grandson," she asks, and I nod, recollecting how I'd found her. The time wistfully burns. We lock our eyes aware of it. Searching for lust, my wandering father found my mother to fill his needs. If he was here, would he cry to see us in this rest home, starngers. I hope the truth's discernable when she speaks. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Oh, how this touched my heart. What joy at the discovery. I'm almost caught speechless with the emotion that I feel. Overwhelmed am I for you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Closure seldom comes easy but the discoveries can be sweet. This touches deep and I too am overwhelmed with the emotions that I feel on this day. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-24-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This has the mark of a story, one I would love to continue reading... will there be more? What did she say? How did your heart answer? O, will there be more? Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
both beautiful and touching..I am unaware of the background...but I remember my grandmother...she never really remembered me..I was always, my sister or someone else in my family that never went to visit...when she passed..I cried for her ...and I cried for me... M |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Marge I'm so glad it touched you like that. You're right Mark closure seldom comes easy and thank you for the comments. Sunshine..... there may be a story to come out of all this I don't know yet. Thanks for your kind words. M. Moonchild: Strange how they escape you until it's too late. I can just imagine her calling you by another name. There must have been times when you got quite a chuckle out of that. Thanks for your comments Maureen. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have brought back memories of my grandmother in the rest home and a poem I wrote...I hope you don't mind me posting it here. Grandmother The lines etched across her face are like a braided rug made from pieces of yesterday. Her fingers tremble now as she cradles baby time, and the rocking rhythm, inborm, gentles sorrow as she forgets the unessential sequence of events and calls me by my mother's name and my child by mine and then herself a child again waits to be unborn. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh yes ethome finish this story for us please...what a wonderful beginning never say never |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I most certainly don't mind Martie...Post anything you want. I thought your descriptions of your grandmother were very well done I could picture her. I'm glad you posted it here. Thanks Paula... now you and Sunshine have got me going. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You have shared a touching moment with us... it's an honor...you wove the moment into a gem of a poem~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Butterflies...I am glad to be able to share these things openly. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I was deeply touched by this beautiful rendering Ethome ... so sweetly you penned these thoughts!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Kit I'm glad you found it to be so touching, I appreciate. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Closure is important my friend. . .so glad that you found yours. . . Excellent. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
So touching! I want to know more, too.  Gossamerwings ;) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
ethome, your voice in this piece is genuine, discernable. An intriguing vignette, to be sure. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Very nice poem, vivid and compelling! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Sven It's a long story that I have never been able to talk about. Thank you GW for your oh so kind words. Thanks Claire you r comments mean so much to me. Thanks Todd for the compelling words. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh how did I miss this treasured gem.. E, you have touched my soul with this heartkissed poem...I lack the words to tell you how if effects me.. thank you my friend. jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This one embraced my heart Thank you for posting it Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ethome, your work continues to impress me, evolving with each poem. Corinne |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Janet Marie, Elizabeth and Corinne. I appreciate your comments so very much..thank you again. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you, ethome---smiles for my grandmaw today...(she's been on my mind alot lately...) This is truly a thoughtful piece...I enjoyed it much. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
ethome- It is rare to find a post that forces one to stop and relate to thier lives. You concocted a beautiful elixer of truth, emotion, and flow in this poem. kudos. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Serenity and Beowulf for letting me touch your heart with this, I know exactly what you mean.....Thanks again! |
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