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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-07-21 01:57 PM


       What my children say

His bearded head rests on his chest
Like an egg on a feathered nest.
Moving hairs in a gentle flow
Like wind blowing feathery snow.

His eyelids work in active REM
Phantoms objects moving them.
Behind each lid is scenery
A fantasy in greenery.

Who knows the Camelot in store?
Who knows which Gweniveer or more?
Who knows the heart in freedoms fly?
Who knows what love has caught his eye?

He is a knight on lovers quest,
With favor flying from his crest.
He sits his horse in rhythmic beat.
And all the world is at his feet.

He's Galahad with all his air
And never ever left his chair.


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ma miller
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1 posted 2000-07-21 02:05 PM


love this Seymour ... great pace and feel ... well done ...< !signature-->

My calling before me, let quill be my offering;
For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive.

M.A.



[This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-21-2000).]

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2000-07-21 05:45 PM


Ma Miller,
Bad title but thanks for the read and comment.

Sunnyone
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3 posted 2000-07-21 05:50 PM


Seymore...
         This tells me a lot about you, as
    our children see us better than we see
    ourselves!!

          This was wonderful to read
            and beautifully written...


~~~~~~~~~~Never~~~~~~~~~~
say
~~~~~~~~~~Never~~~~~~~~~~


Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2000-07-21 06:55 PM


Sunny1,
Enjoyed the comment, thanks for the read.

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5 posted 2000-07-21 08:03 PM


Seymour~

My friend, my friend ....
what pleasant thoughts to have thought about you.

I liked this line -

'He's Galahad with all his air
And never ever left his chair'

Enjoyed very much.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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6 posted 2000-07-21 08:15 PM


This is delightful, Seymour!

Denise

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2000-07-21 09:17 PM


Marge,
Hark do I hear Gweniveer? *L*

Denise,
Thank you for the delightful. *L*

Nan
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8 posted 2000-07-21 11:07 PM


There you go again... with the dynamic couplet finale... Nice job, my dear friend...
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2000-07-22 09:01 AM


Thank you sweet Nan, *L*
Balladeer
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10 posted 2000-07-22 09:11 PM


Oh, I like this one, Sy. Many of us are armchair Lancelots.....and then we stand up. Thank God for fertile imaginations  
Sunshine
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11 posted 2000-07-23 08:53 AM


Oh my dear Sir
wherefrom in your past
did you once gaze on me
when I was but a lass?

For in my dreams
I see you standing there
forever will you be
tall and true, of gallant air...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2000-07-23 06:29 PM


Balladeer,
Great comment, thank you.

Sunshine,
Just give me your favor
And I will be your knight. *L*

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