Open Poetry #8 |
If You Go |
Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
If I had you I could say what I feel, If you had me We could make it real. Right now we're stuck in a curse, Its not even helping writting this verse. I dont know whats going to come of us now, I already know whats going to happen somehow. You know this child belongs to you, Deep down, You know it too. But, my love, I cant make you stay, I can only watch As you slip away. Please return back to us, We need to talk, Theres things to discuss. You know I love you With all my heart, I cant blame you For not wanting this start. Your young and want all things good, But in reality, Your not acting the way you should. You need to take responsiblity and care, This baby needs us, We need love to share. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I'm very much going to have to start looking for your work, so far this morning I have read two very open and honest pieces and I loved them both. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This is a sad plea and it tears at my heart. It is written beautifully and I only hope that it is answered with a positive note. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Beth - extrememly moving content here...you write with powerful emotion. 'Its not even helping writing this verse.' I have felt this before, oh yes, I can identify! K |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
this was so honest and heartfelt..writing does help, Beth, releasing the hurt allows others to care. ~~soft hugs Maureen |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Jeffrey, Thankyou so very much. Your so kind~ ~Mark, Unfortunately it was negative but, hey, life goes on. Thankyou for your reply~ ~Severn, Writtings a great way to express emotions but sometimes its just not enough. Thankyou deeply for your reply~ ~Maureen, Your words are very true. Thankyou for your sweet reply~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Beth, I have only read, I believe, one of your poems so far. If I knew that you wrote like this I would have read many more. If I can, after reading this one, I will read all that you can write. You are very good, at least to my eyes. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Beth..... I also love the honesty of your work, and this poem is extremely tender and sad. You write beautifully!! ~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~ taste every single moment |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Beth, you write of so many very sad subjects I wish for you a rainbow of hope, love and beautiful things. This is raw and painful work you have written from your heart~ |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Bill, Your reply has touched me. You are so very sweet. Thanks for the encouragement~ ~Sunny1, Thankyou so much..I guess honesty is my best virtue. ~ ~B_D_C~ Oh sometimes I wish I had that rainbow..I need something positive to happen (lol)..I guess..Oneday it will come. Thankyou~ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
My son went through the same experience ... he wished to give his newborn daughter a stable home with loving parents ... but he was left standing at the lamp post ... and I've never seen my grandaughter since. We circle the block a thousand times ... but we can't take for granted ... the sights we'll see very well done Beth Rex |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
You write so openly, you convey emotion that gently touches my heart. This is another fine example. I hope the world finds you smiling! |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Rex..My heart goes out to you deeply. Raising a child is not an easy task as I have done it alone for two years now, regardless of my situation, I hope the future looks brighter for you and you family.Thankyou for you sweet reply~ ~Trew..Your reply deeply touched me. Thankyou for your kind words~ |
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