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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri

0 posted 2000-07-16 12:04 PM


I can't dance in
   the snow for you.
I can't promise I'll
   never cry.
What you ask of me
   just isnt possible
To sit back and
   just let us die.

I can't sing in
   the rain for you.
To celebrate the
   death of what we share.
Love isn't all sunshine
   and rainbows
You get through the good
   with the bad when you care.

I can't fly in
   the wind for you
When flying means
   leaving you behind.
I gave you my love
   and I meant it
And not even death
   can change my mind.

I can't swim in
   the sea for you
Some things are just
   worth the fight.
Let my love lead you
   out of your darkness
And into a new loves
   bright light.



never say never

© Copyright 2000 Paula Finn - All Rights Reserved
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-07-16 12:15 PM


I love these lines.
"I can't dance in the snow for you...
I can't sing in the rain for you..
I can't fly in the wind for you..
I can't swim in the sea for you..'

but
"let my love lead you
out of your darkness"......

Very loyal mature approach yet presented with a poetic beauty.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
2 posted 2000-07-16 12:24 PM


Oh Paula....

    This one is so right!! I loved the
    meaning of it...and especially loved
    
         "I can't dance in the snow
                for you...."

          Poetically beautiful!!!!!!


Live for today and enjoy the moment.....


ma miller
Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

3 posted 2000-07-16 12:35 PM


smooth lines and flow, paula ... great stuff.
Kyle aka Huck
Member
since 2000-07-16
Posts 63
Linn, MO USA
4 posted 2000-07-16 10:44 PM


hi




[This message has been edited by Kyle aka Huck (edited 07-16-2000).]

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
5 posted 2000-07-16 11:24 PM


ethome...the words came easy it was the emotion behind them that was hard.

Sunny1...glad you liked it.

MA...thanks

Kyle..hey again kid

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
6 posted 2000-07-21 11:35 PM


once more please
MMoonchild
Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
PA
7 posted 2000-07-22 08:21 PM


very nice...

many  wonderful images  here, Paula

I can't sing in
   the rain for you.
To celebrate the
   death of what we share


~~softly enjoyed
Maureen

jennie may*
Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122

8 posted 2000-07-22 11:27 PM


I immediately related to this one--I love the setup and the message...good poem

"We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
9 posted 2000-07-23 01:04 PM


Back to the top this one goes.  I really love this one of yours.


Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
10 posted 2000-07-24 01:54 AM


MMoonchild....thanks

Jennie May...a chance remark set this one to being...

Mark...thanks my friend glad you like it so well


never say never

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