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Nameless dream |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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As a young girl, she would dream About fortune and fame She also felt a deep desire... Something she couldn’t name She dreamed of happiness and bliss She could name them all but this With the years, the desire grew Along with her chances of fame As she made her way to the top She dreamed the dream without a name Closer to happiness and bliss In sight was everything but this Finally, she made her break And jetted to her fame And the entire time, she longed For the dream without a name Possessing every single dream But she was missing something, it seemed Reaching out to touch their star They’re screaming, all the same All the time, she is reaching out For the dream without a name Everyone around her cares But there’s still something that isn’t there She got married to a model boy That just seemed so sweet At first, she thought she’d found the dream That would make her life complete She had everything, it seemed Everything but the nameless dream She grew old, and was ready to die She had long ago lost her fame Her final day, she prayed one prayer: To know her great dream’s name Before she took to the heavens above The whispered answer came to her... Love "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow my friend...this is extremely powerful and so true...wonderful work here, as always!  *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very nicely done I guess one would need to experience love before one would know what was missing from ones' life |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent work LoveBug I thoroughly enjoyed this |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Good introduction, body and conclusion with well done lines and verses. The truth that escapes some featured in the last line proves the wisdom of the poem. Fortune and fame are'nt necessarily the answer to eveything. Excellent!! |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Thanks for the replies, all! They mean a lot "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Love Bug* This is so deep and so beautifully written but above all so sad.....such a shame she had to wait so long for the mystery to be revealed to her.....such is poetry  Thankyou so much for sharing this~ |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Erica! You had me guessing throughout ... until you revealed her dream at the end. What a perfect message, and beautifully rendered. Loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Before she took to the heavens above The whispered answer came to her... Love =================== this is excellent story telling LB.. creative and wisdom filled very cool weave... loved the impact of the last lines great writing later-love-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Oh sooo sad LoveBug....but so very well written!!! Enjoyed this!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Amazing and sad at the same time. This one goes in my file. Well done and beautifully expressed. |
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