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Somewhere Between |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada 
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There's a point, I know, somewhere between A long goodbye and a diamond ring. We're not there yet, the journey's long. I'll walk a while; Your love, I'll bring. Kick aside the stones of discontent And scale the fence of promise bent Of jealous pride, the river's wide I'll fight to shore before I'm spent. With you, my guide, to see me through And I , as yours, for the journey too. The guiding star, for travels far And all the roads lead back to you. There's a point, I know, somewhere between A long goodbye and a diamond ring. I'll meet you there and take your hand. Eternal love To my life, bring. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Trew~ This is just lovely. Particularly liked this thought - 'all the roads lead back to you' Great job ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such sweet and lovely sentiments Trew ... beautifully penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Obviously from the heart ... Great read ... Thanks for sharing ...< !signature--> My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A.M. [This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
True, Such sweet sentiments and romantic thoughts flowing from your pen tonight!! This was absolutly beautiful. You have my vote!!  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I like the thoughts here...I am considering buying someone a diamond ring and I don't know if it is the right time...but I hope it is...James |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Trew this is so very lovely and just the idea...a long goodbye and a diamond ring...who can say what tomorrow may bring so grab today...good stuff my friend |
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LiLOnE Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 41Sudbury, Ma |
Trew, Looks like you put a lot of emotion in to this poem.... It reminds me of a poem I have read before... It's nice!.... |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Hey everyone! This one was a little outside my norm. I don't usually work in rhyme, but I thought I would try! Marge ~ Thank you! "All the roads" was in reference to the fact that every turn my mind took, I couldn't see going anywhere without her. Kit ~ Thanks! For a sweet person! M.A.M. ~ It was from the heart! Thanks for reading. Lone Wolf ~ Double thanks! Sometimes, the ink is made o' sugar! Hmm... can you marry a muse? James ~ Only one way to find out, my friend. If it is the right time and you miss it... well... Thanks for taking time for me! Paula ~ I couldn't agree more. Carpe Diem! Tomorrow might be a little too late. You still listening James? Hehehe! Thanks for reading, Paula. LilOnE ~ (I love your name!) I'm glad you felt it. It might be the meter of the poem you recognize. (?) I borrowed the basics from "Spanish Train". Thanks so much! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Kick aside the stones of discontent And scale the fence of promise bent Of jealous pride, the river's wide I'll fight to shore before I'm spent. With you, my guide, to see me through And I , as yours, for the journey too. The guiding star, for travels far And all the roads lead back to you. This is so filled with positiveness and promise...ya just gotta luv it. Good write my friend. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kick aside the stones of discontent And scale the fence of promise bent Of jealous pride, the river's wide I'll fight to shore before I'm spent. With you, my guide, to see me through And I , as yours, for the journey too. The guiding star, for travels far And all the roads lead back to you. ------------- wow i love this sweet tender poem its just perfect i love the gentle emotions of it the rhyme is perfect as well very well written take cake jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Trew, This has to bump de bump back to the begining because I LOVE IT MUCHES and this is really good, so much enjoyed. welcome to passions, sorry im late there are so many new people to meet. Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Mark ~ I'm very glad you liked it. Thanks for replying! JM ~ Thank you! It seems every time I come within 20 yards of Leanne, another poem pops out. Predominantly gentle ones  Cerenity ~ Thanks so much! It is getting difficult to keep up. Does me proud to know people are reading (and liking) my stuff as much as I am theirs! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is awesome Trew...really good read...I love the repetition at the end - and I think repetition can be a tricky, and you pulled it off well! I love all the imagery of fences and stones and rivers etc...gave me a real sense of scope, saw a kind of comparison between these images and the idea of the love for this person as being as wide as landscape..(Hope that makes sense, lol) Awesome stuff! K |
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