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Abandoned Spring
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Abandoned Spring |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Abandoned Spring Never had I basked in the Summer sun With the warmth and vigor I received from you When our love was fresh and had just begun My heart for life was yours... this I knew Summer breezes left with coolness in the air As the Autumn colors arrived set to unfold Our radiant joy desserted and left in despair When the forcast of your heart promised... a love gone cold Winter winds hurling across my heart With blue hardness never before felt Piercing my soul deep with ice-cycle darts My life's blood slowing before you... frozen I knelt Long winter's powder of tears resting on the sill Barren tundra of trust hybernating in my bed Seeking shelter from the cascading chill Rejoicing in the dreams now lost... in tears I've shed What happened to the now abandoned Spring Where petals of color rise to the butterflies dance And the trees bow as the mockingbirds sing Winds weeping in swirls of joy... as new life is given a chance Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like your season cycle here Mark...relationships do inevitably change...and you portrayed that beautifully here...thank you, I enjoyed much...will be reading more of your work. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
He's at it again ... Great work here, Mark ... Lot's of Spring and Summer pieces floating about these days (all so very good on this board), but this goes full cricle ... Nice intricate details in this one ... A Keeper ... fav line ... Where petals of color rise to the butterflies dance |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mark..... I also enjoyed the changing seasons. "winter winds hurling across my heart.. piercing my soul with ice-cycle darts.." Brrrrrr...I live in Alaska....you just described our winter!! Great job! My heart is an open book ....take a look.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
serenity-thank you for your wonderful reply MA Miller-so glad you liked it and as for the butterflies dance; I am thinking about doing one on that. Thanks for reading Sunny 1-I would love to be in Alaska right now. So happy that you liked the seasons. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--I too love the cycles, the seasons...the tides and the cicles of life...Keeps life interesting and full and complete...Loved your poem! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Never had I basked in the Summer sun With the warmth and vigor I received from you When our love was fresh and had just begun My heart for life was yours... this I knew Summer breezes left with coolness in the air As the Autumn colors arrived set to unfold Our radiant joy desserted and left in despair When the forcast of your heart promised... a love gone cold ----------------- What happened to the now abandoned Spring Where petals of color rise to the butterflies dance And the trees bow as the mockingbirds sing Winds weeping in swirls of joy... as new life is given a chance ------------------ Mark..this is AWESOME!! I love this poem... its imagery, its emotions it creativity and uniqueness...presentation very cool poem my friend... well written from conception to completion. keep em coming...  later-seasons-changing-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Mark, this is very excellent writing...well thought out and well-penned...an effort worthy of admiration. A tip of the hat to you, sir. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree, this is wonderful, Mark! Very nicely done!  Denise |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
Mark... *sigh*....truly beautiful words....It is so wonderful to see that there are others who feel lifes sorrows and pleasures as I do. I hope to someday write words as beautiful as yours. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
you know how this makes me feel |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was simply lovely Mark! The changing seasons moved with your sweet sentiments to culminate in a wonderfully poignant verse. Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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deb Junior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 44Reading, Pa., USA |
enjoyable! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
martie-thank you so much jm-as always I leave with sweetness on my brow when you reply. Thanks so much my friend.  Balladeer-I am honored by your kind words  Denise-thank you Impassionata-you already do. Thank you for your sweet reply Paula-yes I do (try to smile)  Kit- thank you so much for your ever so kind words deb-thank you |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
That was so very beautiful! I love how you write. Sauni |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Saunni-thank you so much. It means alot when I am able to reach someone with what I pen. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-14-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is magnificent work Mark......the imagery and the feeling......WOW!! Beautifully done~ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Mark - this is a great read - I like the pause in the last line of each verse - it sets a very good counterpoint to the season descriptions. Great idea - and you ran with it very well. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Bdc-Love your WOW. Thank you dear one for your always kind words. I do appreciate them so. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Long John-you little sneak. Thought I was caught up on my replies and all of a sudden I was thumped in the back of the head.  Thank you for your kind words and I am truely happy that the pauses set the tone for you as that was my intent. Thanks again o'killer of women's hearts. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Mark, AWESOME is indeed the right word here... enjoyed muchly, regards, sudhir. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sudhir-thank you my kind sir. You are truely the gentleman |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Now that's what I call a perfect blend of content and structure. Just a wonderful poem to experience. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Trew- Thank you so much for those perfect words. Glad that you liked the experience. |
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