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You and you alone |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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Tonight I find myself thinking of you again Just like every night since your name first crossed my lips Can't seem to shake this feeling that I've known you all my life Can't seem to get your vision to leave this weary mind Every night I ask God above "Why does this have to happen now?" And though I never hear his voice the answer is clear and loud "My son! Is it not obvious that every man has one true love?" "That this angel you see before you was sent down from above?" "This is your one chance to gain true happiness" "This is your one chance to be wrapped in heaven's bliss" ***************************** Part two I ask you "Where do we go from here?" You say "I dunno" and then I feel the tears "I wish I had all the answers to take your tears away" "Just know that I'll always love you a little more every day" I feel as if I'm lost in a dream as your vision once again appears A dream that turns into a nightmare with every moment without you here I will never forget the sound of my name the first time I heard it cross your lips Or the way my body trembled and shivered at the mere touch of your fingertips No other will ever have my love I cannot freely give that which I do not own My heart belongs to you To you and you alone ************************************** As of this moment I decline to comment on "who" or "what" this poem is about  [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hello Jeffrey.... No, I won't ask who, and I won't ask what, but I understand why..... Just remember, there can be more than one true love in a lifetime.... Beautiful work... I'm looking forward to reading you again... Life is but a dream... so sleep easy... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Jeffrey, you have sweet poem here and I must add the expression in verse brought out a few tears ... |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Sunny1, Thanks for the kind words and not asking, but I have to disagree ...sorry  Coco, I thank you and I too must add that quite a few tears came along with this piece. Some happy , some sad , but all for one very special lady And mostly tears of joy  (To the one this is for- and I know you know who you are  - I'm looking forward to seeing that beautiful smile again ) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
then I shall wait for part 3 good expression of emotion thus far |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent poetry from you Jeffery, truly majestic flow of emotions... regards, sudhir |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Jeffrey, I would have to echo the sentiments of Sunny1, here. You've seen first hand the darkness and the light in my life. I truly believe EVERYTHING in life happens for a reason - and only Time will reveal that reason. Wonderful display of emotion here, btw... Michael |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You brought an ache of understanding to my heart Jeffrey... no I don't know your "who or what" but often poetry responds with a reflection of soul...not always identical...regardless I felt this one to my toes. Take care sweet poet~ |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
I feel as though you have looked into my secret heart and understood it all. Now, if you come up with an answer to it all please let me know. |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Jeffery I Hadn't read this before I posted my poem , "Touching you". However, I think I can say that I know exactly how you feel. AT one time I was told by my love that "we" could never be. I refused to accept it and kept showing her how much I loved her. In the end she had to accept that she too loved me. I do hope that things work out for you as well as they have for me and I too will be watching for part 3!!< !signature--> Love is like the mumps.....the older you are, the harder it hits you! [This message has been edited by notlikely2 (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I will never forget the sound of my name the first time I heard it cross your lips Or the way my body trembled and shivered at the mere touch of your fingertips No other will ever have my love I cannot freely give that which I do not own My heart belongs to you To you and you alone ------------------ my my my.... we write some AWESOME verse when were in love, dont we this is VERY well expressed emotions from you Jeff-gator... wonderful writing my friend... I'll say to you what I just said to M, love to see ya in love later-romantic-gator jm < !signature--> There are places inside our souls that have never been touched there are places inside our hearts that need to be loved this much jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I cannot tell you how this feels so I'll just say thank you to all of you. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Great Writing as always, my friend. marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
You reached inside me a spoke to my soul with this one!! I am in awe. It was like you were describing my life, I don't know how else to describe it but that way. The part where you wrote: I ask you "Where do we go from here?" You say "I dunno" and then I feel the tears "I wish I had all the answers to take your tears away" "Just know that I'll always love you a little more every day" I had that very conversation with someone who has probably permently stolen my heart. When you find the way to live through this, and the ability to move on, could you let me know how you did it?!! great writing |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thanks Marina Martini, I gotta tell you this isn't about a relationship ending, but that's all I can say for now I'm glad I could touch you with my words. That is always nice to hear |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh, this poem is wonderfully written, but so sad. It brought me to tears! Just remember, if it's meant to be, it will be. If not, something better will come along. Best of luck! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Lovebug, I appreciate your comment and support. Thank you for reading and replying |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JC You lead me to wonder there in your cryptic way whether to feel good or bad you do not quite give say. So be content for the time nay transparent not your rhyme but through the verse be well thought for the here and now is all you've got. You always do this quite well, JC, it's a pleasure to read you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Jeffrey ... certainly mysterious ... but beautifully written. She is a lucky lady indeed to capture your heart. Wonderful verse Jeffrey! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, This was simply beautiful. I will not ask who or how, but just want you to know I for one loved it!!! This was so full of love my friend. Lucky lady indeed!! She must be special to have inspired such emotions. Excellent writing m'friend. Welcome back!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
So Romantic! Such words only come from the heart, a heart that feels true love! I hope to find out who this lucky woman is to have such devoted words spoken to her? Well I'll wait for part three! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Ok, I must say I probably will never be able to enlighten you on who or what this poem is about, but just so you know, it was written with tears in my eyes and love in my heart. And though you will probably never know I would hope that we all come to know this feeling one day Thank you all again for your support and kind words. It is truly an honor to be here among all of you |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Jeffrey, I guess it does not matter who or what only that it reached in and touched your heart enough to be able to share it with the world and that right there makes it a forever thing (call it true love if you will) awesome writting my friend. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Now who's looking into who's heart? never say never |
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