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Emotions in motion
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Emotions in motion |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Emotions in motion Glee - You are called gladness, Can I call you merry instead, Or do you prefer revelry better? Pain - You are called sadness, Can I call you misery instead, Or do you prefer tragedy better? Love - You are called fondness, Can I call you affection instead, Or do you like infatuation better? Hate - you are called bitterness, Can I call you disgust instead, Or do you like detest better? Glee - You stay for brief intervals - I await your visit Pain - You are my usual soul-mate - friendly company Love - You are won after a hard fight - but lost with ease, Hate - You are elusive - yet I feel blessed with great destiny. ----- Not my usual way of writing, my muse went on strike and I have hired a temporary assistant as a stop-gap arrangement.  ----- |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
who likes to be usual? this is great. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like the unusual too...and it's not unusual for me to enjoy your work, sudhir...nicely done... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey temp, seems like you are on your way to be famous too...Look at these lovely people appreciate you... is it not nice??? ...... sorry for that piece, but Paula, Thanks for your lovely words. Serenity, Thank you for reading and for the "nice" too... My regards, Sudhir. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Sudhir, I must disagree with you. It is as "usual" a great poem with great feel. The last line threw me however. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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LittleCookie Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 55asheville,NC,UnitedStates |
Thanks for "spilling" your emotions here, so to speak. This was wonderful! ~~LittleCookie~~ :*)Agile in love,while rooted in soul |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Sudhir~ Well, the temporary muse is doing a good job! It helps to change the norm every now and then, my friend! Thank you for sharing!  Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hey Sudhir. . . I like your temp. . .she (or he) does good work!! Bring them back from time to time, ok?? Wonderful my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Sudhir, although this isn't your usual work, it is thought provoking and well done! I enjoyed it greatly! *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
well...maybe my muse took of with your muse and they are at the beach... I hope they get sunburned LOL Well I sure can relate Sud.... my muse is being such a pain of late... but we gotta keep trying it keeps the creative juices flowing and we can try new things... like this... I really like the unique presentation take care jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jamie, Thanks for reading... The last line might be the most effective line here maybe... my muse thinks so... I am blessed that I have never felt hatred thus far in my life... I bet that is a good thing. LittleCookie, Thanks for reading ... I like your signature line... Sven, Now, this temp of mine is pushing hard to be a permie... what do ya think? ... should perhaps share my time with both of them lovely muses... Thanks for reading... Terry, And thank you for coming by and reading... Krista, I am glad that you found it thought provoking and also that you enjoyed... Thanks... Janet, Thats a huge possibility... I just hope they don't begin to love the SUN instead... Thanks for reading and am happy you liked the way my muse put forward these words... regards to all, Sudhir |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
lol can just see your muse...carrying a protest sign and marching back and forth...lol...but the only thing he could be striking against is being overworked...you have been writing some great poems lately...this one included |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
working with different styles broadens our horizons, vearing away from the safe and known. So keep exploring! Fondly, corinne |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Well the temp did well! Excellent emotions coming through. Enjoyed this one. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I must be going insane, I am so sure I posted a reply to the poem Sudhir. It must have gotten lost on the way or else the radiation on this screen is eating away my brain. anyway, a wonderful poem. Continue to experiment. my commenst, better late than never. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I really enjoyed this format Sudhir! Can I borrow your temp when you're done? I love her/his? inspiration! Really well done!Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corazon, What can I do but bow and thank you for your lovely kind words... Thats a huge statement and coming from you it feels very good... Corinne, What a wonderful thought... Thank You... Eloise, I am glad that you enjoyed this one. Thanks for reading... Brian, I really appreciate your coming back to post your comments... always so kind in your words... Thank you a lot... Kit, I am pleased that you enjoyed this one... and yes you can have my temp or even my permie muse... whichever you like to have... Thanks for reading... Regards to all, Sudhir |
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eyesplus2 Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 163australia |
To know ones emotions....is to know ones true self. very good eyes |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sudhir~ I think the way you presented this was very individual indeed....I loved it and the comment about your muse made me laugh so much  thanksTracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) No matter what muse you use it came out great different is always a hit with me.....not sure why....lol  By the way can I get a list of "for hire" muses....mine just isn't shaping up right now...would love to teach her a lesson..."You Can Be Replaced"... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sudhir-I have read this one over and over and I agree with crowd. Your temp serves you well. Must be nice to have such great back-up. I especially loved the line: Hate - You are elusive - yet I feel blessed with great destiny. That line deserves one of it's own. We will be waiting. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If your "temp"orary becomes con"temp"orary give me a little sign and I will co-sign on. Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This muse is getting real proud here. winks at me and says "Hey sudhir, look at these people now they want to hire me as well... now I demand a raise."  ----- eyes+2, Thank You, your eyes see the truth so nicely... Tracie, am glad that I could provide some free entertainment... next time you might have to buy a ticket, my "temp" muse is getting demanding... Thanks a lot for reading... Butterflies_dont_cry, Thats the problem, I cannot find a single headhunter having even a temporary muse... So I am gonna hold on tight to this one for a while... .. Thanks a lot for reading...Mark, You are very kind.. Thank You... Karilea, the ever sunny, Thank you a great deal. I will flash a light, so you can see... 3 short ones and 1 long one, but there is a huge demand these days, be sure to be there first... regards to all, Sudhir |
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