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The Power to Tick me Forward
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The Power to Tick me Forward |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Power to Tick me Forward What is this restless tossing back of heart like an errant lock of hair falling over my eyes it distorts my vision with its dark strands that yearn for cutting It almost weeps it is so filled up with longing and I can’t find its opening must have been forged long ago and forgotten one July day when the hot sun melted a thought of you So now I am laid out and burning and my crust curls and I toss my hair back pin it up and away from this need and see yesterday’s face looking looking across the distance I have drawn and I sketch her youth on yellowed paper and breathe each stroke into a word and turn this unanswered thought into the power that will tick me forward [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Time blurred memories urging hopeful movement. Forward. Very nice Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
and see yesterday’s face looking looking across the distance I have drawn and I sketch her youth on yellowed paper and breath each stroke into a word and turn this unanswered thought into the power that will tick me forward ...... Martie, very well expressed thoughts, beautifully written... Regards, sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was powerful Martie ... I seemed to read each line faster and faster with more urgency. Loved this ... wonderful poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this poem was written with a power to tick the reader forward, couldn't wait to get to the end, and then wanted to read it again, love the image of the wayward hair and how you wove this together  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What is this restless tossing back of heart like an errant lock of hair falling over my eyes it distorts my vision with its dark strands that yearn for cutting It almost weeps it is so filled up with longing and I can’t find its opening must have been forged long ago and forgotten one July day when the hot sun melted a thought of you -------------- pin it up and away from this need and see yesterday’s face looking looking across the distance I have drawn and I sketch her youth on yellowed paper and breathe each stroke into a word and turn this unanswered thought into the power that will tick me forward ------------------ oh man ... I'd like to worship this poem... but i cant type for POET ENVY  absolutely awesome Martie ... amazing use of metaphor... amazing depth of emotion... color me jaded ... jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Exceptional poetry Martie... the stroke of your pen has breathed a jewel of a poem upon us.... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Goodness Martie, You've gone and done it again!!! You've knocked me of of my chair!! EXCELLENT!!! sweet one! You are incredible!! and I sketch her youth on yellowed paper and breathe each stroke into a word and turn this unanswered thought into the power that will tick me forward Beautiful! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Unbelievable thoughts Liz |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, you just keep doing wonderful things, MArtie and I continue to read in admiration. Now excuse me while I go pick Dark Angel up off the floor  "Tick me forward Tick me back" I could hear her scoff. "Tick me up or Tick me down But just don't tick me off!" |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Wonderful - subtle - yet elusive ... what a talent for the unique ... See ... you leave us all either breathless or on the floor ! POWERFUL ! LOL @ that Balladeer !  'tossing back of heart like an errant lock of hair' *sighing* here ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Promethious--thank you so much...I think hope always moves forward. Sudhir--thanks for reading and for your thoughtful reply. Kit--I'm so glad you saw power in this...your reply made me feel great. Corazon--Thank you for such a heart warming reply. Your enthusiasm emazes me Janet...thanks dear! Mike--if you see a jewel then I am happy... Dark Angel--Goodness, what a wonderful, enthusiastic reply!! Thank you so much...Balladeer is coming to the rescue. Liz--thanks so much for such a nice reply, sweet lady. Balladeer--your admiration is worth alot to me...and thanks for picking up Dark Angel and for the little rhyme. Marge--how do you always manage to reply with such beautiful heart warming words? You must be special. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
We are forever haunted by those who have left, perhaps it is in the knowing that someday we will be rejoined with them. Corinne |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
martie, wonderfully written. fabulous images. really enjoyed. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I think this worthy of submission - If you've the courage - try alsop's - it might net you $100 ~S~ - it's worth more than that to me ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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